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You have some time off work and are hoping to visit a close friend, Stephanie, for a few days.

You have some time off work and are hoping to visit a close friend, Stephanie, for a few days. RNRpG
Dear Stephanie, I hope you’re doing great. I’m planning to visit you in your home town for this year's car festival. I’m taking time off from work for the next few days. So, I will be there in your native for this year’s festival too. Your village festival has its own significance and creates wonderful surroundings. I liked it and eager to see it again. I have booked my train tickets. This time I will be there a day before the festival, so we can spend the moment together. Last year, we planned many things for the festival bullock cart ride, Kite flying, giant wheel ride, Rangoli, colouring pot, outdoor cooking wall painting competition, also visiting Mahal, Circus, and Aquarium, but unfortunately, we could not do so because of rain. This time I will be having my laptop and a new digital camera to capture all the happy moments. I bought a few new dresses for myself and for you. I learned how to prepare recipes through online classes. This will help us to participate in the cooking competition. This time we should fulfil last year’s plan. I look forward to seeing you soon
Dear Stephanie,

I hope you’re doing great. I’m planning to visit you in your home town for this year's car festival.

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too. Your village
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significance and creates wonderful surroundings. I liked it and eager to
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it again. I have booked my train tickets. This
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bullock cart ride, Kite flying, giant wheel ride,
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I will be having my laptop and a new digital camera to capture all the happy moments. I
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a few new dresses for myself and for you.

I learned how to prepare recipes through online classes. This will
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help
us to participate in the cooking competition. This
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we should fulfil last year’s plan.

I look forward to seeing you
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IELTS letter You have some time off work and are hoping to visit a close friend, Stephanie, for a few days.

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