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Hello Sir/Madam, I am writing in connection with job advertisement posted on an Australian magazine. I understand that you need a person who can live with your family and look after your six-year-old child. Knowing the fact that this job is available only for 6 months, I will be very much interested in the same. Truth be told, due to present pandemic, I have lost my job as a day care nurse. I have previous experience as male nanny and I am an active volunteer at an old age home too. I have attached my resume for your reference. Words like patient, tidy, observant and hard working define me. I want to pursue my higher education in future, thereby I would like to prepare for my IELTS exam in my free time. Nevertheless, this is my assurance that it won't impact my duty towards this job. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Kind Regards, Manish
Hello Sir/Madam,

I am writing in connection with job advertisement posted on an Australian magazine. I understand that you need a person who can
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live
with your family and look after your six-year-
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old
child.

Knowing the fact that this job is available
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only
for 6 months, I will be
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very
much interested in the same. Truth be
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told
, due to present pandemic, I have lost my job as a day care nurse. I have previous experience as male
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
nanny and
I am an active volunteer at an
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
age home too. I have attached my resume for your reference. Words like patient, tidy, observant and
This expression is normally spelled as one or with hyphen.
hard working
define me.

I want to pursue my higher education
Did you mean: "in the future"?
in future
, thereby I would like to prepare for my IELTS exam in my free time.
Nevertheless
, this is my assurance that it won't impact my duty towards this job.

I look forward to hearing from you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Kind Regards,

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Manish
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IELTS letter You have seen an advertisement

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
156 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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