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you have seen an advertisement in an english newspaper for a job working in the city museum shop durin you holiday

you have seen an advertisement in an english newspaper for a job working in the city museum shop durin you holiday p5619
Dear sir, I am wring to inquire a posittion which advertised in "The good news" on 20 th of may and I would like to apply to be a member of your museum. I am twenty six year old and obtained a master degree in the department "Teaching english as a foreign language'' at University world languages in 2015. I have been working as an english teacher at school number 9 since I graduated university. Moreover, During my holiday I worked as a recepshinist at ''Zarafshan''hotel as I wanted to have another skill and experience as well. I am proactive and able to do multiple tasks simultaneously. I am currently looking for a job that will allow me to develop my skill and experiences. I believe that I have a number of qualification needed for the job in your workplace, and I have also known russian and german languages in level B2 that can cause me to comunicate with foreign customers easily if you want to hire me as a shop assistant in the shop. In addition, I am sociable and able to get on with new people easily. I also enjoy outdoor activities such as planting flowers and swimming. If you want to invite me an interwiev, I will able to come at any covenient time to you as I desire to have a new job. I look forward to hearing from you as soon as possible. Yours faithfully, John smith.
Dear sir, I am wring to inquire a
posittion
which advertised in
"
The
good
news
"
on
20 th
of may and I would like to apply to be a member of your museum. I am
twenty six
year
old
and obtained a master degree in the department
"
Teaching
english
as a foreign language'' at University world languages in 2015. I have been working as an
english
teacher at school number 9 since I
graduated
university.
Moreover
, During my holiday I worked as a
recepshinist
at ''
Zarafshan
''hotel as I wanted to have another
skill
and experience
as well
. I am proactive and able to do multiple tasks
simultaneously
. I am
currently
looking for a job that will
allow
me to develop my
skill
and experiences.
I
believe that I have a number of qualification needed for the job in your workplace, and I have
also
known
russian
and
german
languages in level B2 that can cause me to
comunicate
with foreign customers
easily
if you want to hire me as a shop assistant in the shop.
In addition
, I am sociable and able to
get
on with new
people
easily
. I
also
enjoy outdoor activities such as planting flowers and swimming. If you want to invite me an
interwiev
, I
will able
to
come
at any
covenient
time to you as I desire to have a new job. I look forward to hearing from you as
soon
as possible. Yours
faithfully
, John smith.
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IELTS letter you have seen an advertisement in an english newspaper for a job working in the city museum shop durin you holiday

Letter
  American English
1 paragraphs
242 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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