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A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time. He/she has asked for advice. write a letter explain why you think he would enjoy describe some disadvantages say whether you would like to go camping with him

A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time. He/she has asked for advice. write a letter explain why you think he would enjoy describe some disadvantages say whether you would like to go camping with him Nkyg
Dear Aman, Recieved your letter regarding your plan for camping trip this summer. First of all, I would like to tell you that your decision of a trip would benefit you in many aspects. I am sure you would enjoy your trip as it will bring new adventure in your life and will also teach you survival skills. Camping trip has always been a fun way to see the nature and be in the wild, with out any distractions. As there are benefits to your trip there are some disadvantages to it as well. One such example can be getting sick on the trip or after returing back home. This may lead to less concentration at work and you may need time to recover from this sickness. I may be considering to join you on your trip as I will be able to guide you during the trip so that you wont face any problems after reaching home. Will let you know if there is any plan as such. Yours Lovingly AAA
Dear
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Aman
,

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Recieved
your letter regarding your plan for camping
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trip
this summer.
This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, I would like to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
tell
you that your decision of a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trip
would benefit you in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
aspects.

I am sure you would enjoy your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trip
as it will bring new adventure in your life and will
also
teach you survival
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
. Camping
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trip
has always been a fun way to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
the nature and be in the wild,
This word is usually written together. Did you mean "without"?
with out
any distractions.

As there are benefits to your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trip
there are
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
disadvantages to it
as well
. One such example can be getting sick on the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trip
or after
Possible spelling mistake found.
returing
back home. This may lead to less concentration at work and you may need time to recover from this sickness.

I may be considering to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
join
you on your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trip
as I will be able to guide you during the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
trip
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that you
Please make sure you mean 'wont' (a habit), not "won't"/"won’t" (short for 'will not')?
wont
face any problems after reaching home.

Will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
you know if there is any plan as such.

Yours
Lovingly


AAA

IELTS letter A friend of yours is thinking of going on a camping holiday for the first time. He/she has asked for advice. write a letter explain why you think he would enjoy describe some disadvantages say whether you would like to go camping with him

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
171 words
5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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