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You are temporarily moving to a new city for your job. You will be there for three months,and you would like to rent some accommodation for your stay. Write to an accommodation rental office. In your letter Tell them how long you are staying Describe the type of accommodation you would like Explain what facilities you will need nearby

You are temporarily moving to a new city for your job. You will be there for three months, and you would like to rent some accommodation for your stay. Write to an accommodation rental office. In your letter Tell them how long you are staying Describe the type of accommodation you would like Explain what facilities you will need nearby 72Lb
Dear Sir or madam, I would like to inquiry about renting a place for three months. My name is Nilam Chauhan and I am moving to London for some project work. Thus, I require to rent a place. First of all, I do not have any mode of transportation with me. Therefore, I am looking for a place near to bus station or tube station. Also, for somedays I might be working from home. Hence, good internet must be required. Small house or flat would be fine as I will not be cooking in home. I enjoyed shopping a lot and I prefer to leave where shops are easily accessiable. I am also looking for information regarding any event in these three month. I hope given information suffice to find a place for me. Looking forward for your reply. Yours faithfully, Nilam Chauhan
Dear Sir or madam,

I would like to inquiry about renting a place for three months. My name is
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Nilam
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
Chauhan and
I am moving to London for
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
project work.
Thus
, I require to rent a place.

This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".
First of all
, I do not have any mode of transportation with me.
Therefore
, I am looking for a place near to bus station or tube station.
Also
, for
Possible spelling mistake found.
somedays
I might be working from home.
Hence
,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
internet
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
must
be required
.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Small
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
or flat would be fine as I will not be cooking in home.

I enjoyed shopping a lot and I prefer to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
leave
where shops are
easily
Possible spelling mistake found.
accessiable
. I am
also
looking for information regarding any
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
event
in these three month.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
hope
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
information suffice to find a place for me. Looking forward for your reply.

Yours
faithfully
,

Possible spelling mistake found.
Nilam
Chauhan
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IELTS letter You are temporarily moving to a new city for your job. You will be there for three months, and you would like to rent some accommodation for your stay. Write to an accommodation rental office. In your letter Tell them how long you are staying Describe the type of accommodation you would like Explain what facilities you will need nearby

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  American English
7 paragraphs
142 words
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less than 250 words in Task 2
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5.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 7.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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