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You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

Dear Sir or Madam, My name is Robert, a resident of Auckland, New Zealand. I came across your advertisement in the Sydney edition of the Vogue magazine for a live-in baby-sitter and I want to put forth my candidature for this position. I am currently a doctorate student in Anthropology and as part of my research, I would like to relocate to Australia for six months starting Jan 2021. To sustain myself, I am looking for an accommodation and a job opportunity in Sydney. I have worked for over 2 years in the past, at a local creche in Auckland and I have relevant experience managing and nurturing kids. In fact, I had been recognized as one of the best employees during my stint. Separately, living with an Australian family would surely help me in my research and in my free time, I would love to explore Australian culture further. I hope you will consider my relevant credentials and genuine requirement and would extend this offer. Hope to hear back from you at the earliest. Yours sincerely, Robert JobSeeker
Dear Sir or Madam,

My name is Robert, a resident of Auckland, New Zealand. I came across your advertisement in the Sydney edition of the Vogue magazine for a
live
-in baby-sitter and I want to put forth my candidature for this position.

I am
currently
a doctorate student in Anthropology and as part of my research, I would like to relocate to Australia for six months starting Jan 2021. To sustain myself, I am looking for an accommodation and a job opportunity in Sydney.

I have worked for over 2 years in the past, at a local
creche
in Auckland and I have relevant experience managing and nurturing kids. In fact, I had
been recognized
as one of the best employees during my stint.

Separately
, living with an Australian family would
surely
help
me in my research and in my free time, I would
love
to explore Australian culture
further
.

I hope you will consider my relevant credentials and genuine requirement and would extend this offer. Hope to hear back from you at the earliest.

Yours
sincerely
,

Robert
JobSeeker
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IELTS letter You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child.

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  American English
8 paragraphs
178 words
6.5
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