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Dear Jill, I want to let you know about this great opportunity for us to learn more about Indonesian cooking.

Dear Jill, I want to let you know about this great opportunity for us to learn more about Indonesian cooking. Our local college has advertised that they are going to introduce a 10 week course on Indonesian cooking. Classes will be held twice a week (Tuesday and Thursday), starting at 6 pm and running for 8 weeks. The first class starts next week and all classes are held at the college, which is just so convenient for us both! I remember that when we went to Jakarta last year you raved about the food, so I know you’ll be interested in going to these classes. Just imagine what it would be like, being able to cook our own Indonesian meals. There will also be guest chefs from some of Sydney’s top Indonesian restaurants. I can hardly wait! How about you? Let’s meet to discuss this idea. How about getting together on Friday for dinner? Let me know if you’re free and I’ll make a booking for 7 pm. Indonesian of course! Love Jenny
Dear Jill,

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course on Indonesian cooking.
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(Tuesday and Thursday), starting at 6 pm and running for 8
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convenient for us both!

I remember that when we went to Jakarta last year you raved about the food,
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I know you’ll
be interested
in going to these
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classes
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imagine what it would be like, being able to cook our
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Indonesian meals. There will
also
be guest chefs from
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of Sydney’s top Indonesian restaurants. I can hardly wait! How about you?

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Let
’s
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meet
to discuss this
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idea
. How about getting together on Friday for dinner?
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me know if you’re
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free and
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a booking for 7 pm. Indonesian
of course
!

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Jenny

IELTS letter Dear Jill, I want to let you know about this great opportunity for us to learn more about Indonesian cooking.

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  American English
7 paragraphs
172 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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Task Achievement: 5.5
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