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A friend of yours recently gave you a nice birthday present. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, – thank her for the present and say why you particularly like it – describe some other presents that you received – explain some of the things you did on your birthday.

A friend of yours recently gave you a nice birthday present. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, – thank her for the present and say why you particularly like it – describe some other presents that you received – explain some of the things you did on your birthday. ykVV
Dear Sarah, Hope this letter finds you in good health. How are you doing? Thank you for the mobile phone that you have ordered for my birthday and I received it yesterday. I loved the shinning metallic blue back case of the phone. The camera quality is excellent and we took many photos during the dinner. The additional RAM and storage space makes the phone perform even better, especially for gaming. My parents bought me new dresses for my birthday, a casual white shirt and blue denim which I always was longing for. I also got a Fasttrack digital watch as a present from my college friends. All our friends and I went to a movie and at night we had a nice dinner party and a large cake with family. I really missed you during the celebration. When you will be back in town? Hope to see you soon. Best Wishes, John
Dear Sarah,

Hope this letter finds you in
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
health. How are you doing? Thank you for the mobile phone that you have ordered for my birthday and I received it yesterday.

I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
loved
the shinning metallic blue back case of the phone. The camera quality is
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
excellent and
we took
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
many
photos during the dinner. The additional RAM and storage space
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
makes
the phone perform even better,
especially
for gaming.

My parents
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bought
me new dresses for my birthday, a casual white shirt and blue denim which I
The adverb 'always' is usually put after the verb 'was'.
always was
longing for. I
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
a
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Fasttrack
digital
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
watch
as a present from my college friends.

All our friends and I went to a movie and at night we had a nice dinner party and a large cake with family. I
really
missed you during the celebration.

When you will be back in town? Hope to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
see
you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Best Wishes,

John

IELTS letter A friend of yours recently gave you a nice birthday present. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter, – thank her for the present and say why you particularly like it – describe some other presents that you received – explain some of the things you did on your birthday.

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  American English
8 paragraphs
152 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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