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You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter explain why you would like the job give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses.

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter explain why you would like the job give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia You do NOT need to write any addresses. Wx2b
You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter explain why you would like the job give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Dear Sir, I am writing this letter in response to an advertisement in a magazine where you stated that you require a caretaker for your six-month-old child. My native country is Pakistan, Currently, I am in Australia for work purposes. I am interested in this job as I have experience in this field. I have studied educational psychology and I have work experience of about 8years in a daycare center of my hometown providing babysitting services to the children whose parents are working and are unable to give them time in working hours. I am a very well-organized, tidy, and responsible person. I love spending time with children and I am quite well in mingling with children. That's why I am interested in this job. If I had a chance to live with your family, I would spend time visiting tourist places, learning Australian languages and local food. Thank you for giving me time to read my letter. Feel free to contact me, if you need further references and recommendations. Yours Faithfully, Mahwish Fatima
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an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to
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live
with a family for six months and look after their six-year-
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child.

Write a letter to the parents. In your
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letter


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explain
why you would like the job

give
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details
of why you would be a suitable person to employ

say how you would spend your free
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time
while you are in Australia

Write at least 150 words.

You do NOT need to write any addresses. Dear Sir, I am writing this letter in response to an advertisement in a magazine where you stated that you require a caretaker for your six-month-
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old
child. My native country is Pakistan,
Currently
, I am in Australia for work purposes. I
am interested
in this job as I have experience in this field. I have studied educational psychology and I have work experience of about 8years in a daycare center of my hometown providing babysitting services to the children whose parents are working and are unable to give them
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time
in working hours.
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I
am a
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well-organized, tidy, and responsible person.
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I
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love
spending
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time
with
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children and
I am quite well in mingling with children. That's why I
am interested
in this job. If I had a chance to
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live
with your family, I would spend
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
visiting tourist places, learning Australian languages and local food. Thank you for giving me
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
to read my letter. Feel free to contact me, if you need
further
references and recommendations. Yours
Faithfully
,
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Mahwish
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Fatima
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IELTS letter You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter explain why you would like the job give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Letter
  American English
4 paragraphs
252 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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