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You are going on a short course to a training college abroad. It is a college that you have not been to before. Write a letter to the accommodation officer. In your letter, • give details of your course and your arrival/departure date • explain your accommodation needs • ask for information about getting to and from the college

You are going on a short course to a training college abroad. It is a college that you have not been to before. Write a letter to the accommodation officer. In your letter, • give details of your course and your arrival/departure date • explain your accommodation needs • ask for information about getting to and from the college byqW
Dear Sir, The objective of writing this letter is to let you know that I will take part in a training course at your college the next week. It is about six months advanced level Accounting course. I am planning to depart this week on Saturday, and most probably I will be arrived in Oslo in Sunday morning. Before I arrived, I just wanted to enquire a little information about accommodation, such as to my preference I would like to go for one bedroom dormitory with shared kitchen as this kind of place usually most appeals to me because price is reasonable. Besides it, I would really appreciate it, if you could give me some information about whether the college is located in walking distance from the dormitory or not. If not what kind of transportation I am going to take from the place where I am going to stay to the college and how much money I am expected to pay for it. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. Thank you very much. Yours Sincerely, Ughur Gasimov
Dear Sir,

The objective of writing this letter is to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
let
you know that I will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
take part
in a training course at your college the
next
week. It is about six months advanced level Accounting course. I am planning to depart this week on Saturday, and most
probably
I will
be arrived
in Oslo in Sunday morning.

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Before
I arrived, I
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
wanted to
Possible spelling mistake. 'enquire' is British English.
enquire
a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
little
information about accommodation, such as to my preference I would like to go for one bedroom dormitory with shared kitchen as this kind of place
usually
most appeals to me
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
price is reasonable.

Besides
it, I would
really
appreciate it, if you could give me
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
information about whether the college
is located
in walking distance from the dormitory or not. If not what kind of transportation I am going to take from the place where I am going to stay to the college and how much money I am
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expected
to pay for it.

I am looking forward to hearing from you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
. Thank you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
much.

Yours
Sincerely
,

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Ughur
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Gasimov

IELTS letter You are going on a short course to a training college abroad. It is a college that you have not been to before. Write a letter to the accommodation officer. In your letter, • give details of your course and your arrival/departure date • explain your accommodation needs • ask for information about getting to and from the college

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  American English
7 paragraphs
180 words
6.0
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