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You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter 1) explain why you would like the job 2) give details of why you waould be a suitable person to employ 3) say how you would spend your free time while you are in Austraila.

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter 1) explain why you would like the job 2) give details of why you waould be a suitable person to employ 3) say how you would spend your free time while you are in Austraila. LO8G
Dear Sir/Madam, Through an advertisement in Australia Today, I got an opportunity to look into the job offer of baby-sitting, and to live with your family for six-months. I am writing to apply for the baby-sitting position at your house. I live with my family in near-by town of your home for which I am really blessed for. However, to come out of the comfort zone and to develop myself, I have chosen to stay at your home and take care of your child for six-months. Firstly, I hold good experience on baby-sitting since I have worked as baby-sitter after my high school days. Secondly, I like kids so during weekends, I visit varity of orphanages and spend time with children. Lastly, I have raised up my niece since during my middle school. Therefore, I assume that I would be the suitable person for this position. As mentioned earlier, during weekends I visit orphanage and spend time with the children. Also, I spend time with my family and friends during my leisure time. I'm looking forward for a positive hearing from you. Yours sincerly, Shruthi Kedallu Balaji.
Dear Sir/Madam,

Through an advertisement in Australia
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Today
, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
an opportunity to look into the job offer of baby-sitting, and to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
with your family for six-months. I am writing to apply for the baby-sitting position at your
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house
.

I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
with my family in near-by town of your home for which I am
really
blessed for.
However
, to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
out of the comfort zone and to develop myself, I have chosen to stay at your home and take care of your child for six-months.

Firstly
, I hold
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
experience on baby-sitting since I have worked as baby-sitter after my high school days.
Secondly
, I like kids
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so
during weekends, I visit
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varity
of orphanages and spend time with children.
Lastly
, I have raised up my niece since during my middle school.
Therefore
, I assume that I would be the suitable person for this position.

As mentioned earlier, during weekends I visit orphanage and spend time with the children.
Also
, I spend time with my family and friends during my leisure time.

I'm looking forward for a
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positive
hearing from you.

Yours
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sincerly
,

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Shruthi
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Kedallu
Balaji.
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IELTS letter You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter 1) explain why you would like the job 2) give details of why you waould be a suitable person to employ 3) say how you would spend your free time while you are in Austraila.

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6.0
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