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A museum near your home is looking for people to do part-time voluntary unpaid work. you should like to do some voluntary/unpaid work at musemum.

A museum near your home is looking for people to do part-time voluntary unpaid work. you should like to do some voluntary/unpaid work at musemum. BX8j
I am reaching out to you regarding the part-time volunteer job at the museum. From my childhood I have very much interest in Arts and History and also currently pursuing a course in the field Art History. Moreover, the project work for academic credits is on museums hoping volunteer work help for studies and future career. In addition to that, I posses fluent communication in both languages English and French with reading and writing abilities. I am a multi-task oriented and enjoy challenges. I have unique talent of sharing high complex information into terms and concepts that visitors can understand. Due to college schedule I am open for weekend shifts from Morning 7 to Evening 6. If you are seeking for a volunteer with excellent skills and qualities the please consider me as the best choice for the work. I am looking forward to hear from you soon. Best regards, Bala
I am reaching out to you regarding the part-time volunteer job at the museum.

From my childhood I have
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very
much interest in Arts and History and
also
currently
pursuing a course in the field Art History.
Moreover
, the project work for

academic credits is on museums hoping volunteer work
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help
for studies and future career.

In addition
to that,
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I posses
fluent communication in both languages English and French with reading and writing abilities. I am a multi-task oriented and

enjoy challenges. I have unique talent of sharing high complex information into terms and concepts that visitors can understand.

Due to college schedule I am open for weekend shifts from Morning 7 to Evening 6.

If you are seeking for a volunteer with excellent
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skills
and qualities the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
consider me as the best choice for the work. I am looking forward
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to hear
from you
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soon
.

Best regards,

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Bala
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IELTS letter A museum near your home is looking for people to do part-time voluntary unpaid work. you should like to do some voluntary/unpaid work at musemum.

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6.0
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