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You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six- year-old child. Write a letter to the parents.

You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six- year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. KRj9
Dear Sir or Madam I am writing this letter in regards to recent advertisement in the Australian magazine mentioning the opportunity for a vacancy for a nanny to look after a six years old child. After coming through this advert, I promptly decided to write to you as I am confident I am suitable for this position and I love children. I have also been taking care of my nephew since he was 3 years old as both my brother and his wife are working. Moreover I have also worked as a Assistant in the Rainbow Pre-School. In addition to this I easily gel with small children and love to play with them. I look forward to hearing from you soon Yours faithfully, Alisa
Dear Sir or Madam I am writing this letter
Use "in regard to", "with regard to", or more simply "regarding".
in regards to
recent advertisement in the Australian magazine mentioning the opportunity for a vacancy for a nanny to look after a six years
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
child. After coming through this advert, I
promptly
decided to write to you as I am confident I am suitable for this position and I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
children. I have
also
been taking care of my nephew since he was 3 years
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
old
as both my brother and his wife are working.
Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Moreover
I have
also
worked as
Use "an" instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
a
Assistant in the Rainbow
Possible spelling mistake found.
Pre-School
.
In addition
to this I
easily
gel with
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
children and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
love
to play with them. I look forward to hearing from you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon


Yours
faithfully
,
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
Alisa

IELTS letter You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six- year-old child. Write a letter to the parents.

Letter
  American English
1 paragraphs
123 words
This writing has been penalized,
text can't be
less than 250 words in Task 2
and less than 150 words in Task 1
4.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
  • ?
    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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