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You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter Explain why you would like the job Give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ Say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

Dear Sir/Madam, I am writing this letter to express my interest to an advertisement published on 02-02-2021 in an Australian magazine, where you asked for a short term childcare for your kid. I am extremely confident that I would be able to take care of child and give careful care since I have had a wonderful experience in raising younger siblings on my own as eldest person of my family. Besides, I found children as a full of joy that is why I took care of many young kids as a babysitter in my hometown. In fact, I have completed certificate course about how to do parenting. I will definitely come to Australia by next month to see my uncle and plan to stay there for a while with my uncle's family. While staying there, i have a plan visit all beautiful places and learn people's culture and history. Hope I will get a response from you and would get this job. I look forward from hearing from you soon. Yours sincerely, Beulah.
Dear Sir/Madam,

I am writing this letter to express my interest to an advertisement published on 02-02-2021 in an Australian magazine, where you
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asked for
a short term childcare for your kid.

I am
extremely
confident that I would be able to take care of child and give careful care since I have had a wonderful experience in raising younger siblings on my
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own
as
A determiner is probably missing here: “the eldest”.
eldest
person of my family.
Besides
, I found children as a full of joy
that is
why I took care of
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many
young kids as a babysitter in my hometown. In fact, I have completed certificate course about how to do parenting.

I will definitely
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come
to Australia by
next
month to
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see
my uncle and plan to stay there for a while with my uncle's family. While staying there,
Is this the personal pronoun “I”? It is spelled uppercase.
i
have a plan visit all
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beautiful
places and learn
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people
's culture and history.

Hope I will
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get
a response from you and would
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get
this job.

I look forward from hearing from you
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soon
.

Yours
sincerely
,

Beulah.

IELTS letter You have seen an advertisement in an Australian magazine for someone to live with a family for six months and look after their six-year-old child. Write a letter to the parents. In your letter Explain why you would like the job Give details of why you would be a suitable person to employ Say how you would spend your free time while you are in Australia

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
173 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
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