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You Have Seen An Advertisement In A Magazine For Someone To Live With A Family For Six Months To Look After Their Child

Dear Sir/Mam, I am writing to express interest in a babysitter job which you gave in weekly Brisbane magazine on 28 June edition. I am currently living in India with my family, and I love caring for children. I always have a keen attraction to Australian culture. While at the job, it would be a great time to explore and learn your culture while staying with your family. I am a professional caregiver as I have done a course in Nanny. I also worked in Singapore as a babysitter for one year for two children. Recently come out I came back to my country, and now I am looking for a new job. I can assure you to provide my best service. As you mentioned in the advert that you are living in Brisbane and your child is going to school for 5 hours on weekdays. I think the best way to spend my leisure time is to attend an advanced English language course to improve my communication and language skills. I look forward to hearing from you. Kind regards, James.
Dear Sir/Mam,

I am writing to express interest in a babysitter job which you gave in weekly Brisbane magazine on 28 June edition.

I am
currently
living in India with my family, and I
love
caring for children. I always have a keen attraction to Australian culture. While at the job, it would be a great time to explore and learn your culture while staying with your family.

I am a professional caregiver as I have done a course in Nanny. I
also
worked in Singapore as a babysitter for one year for two children. Recently
come
out I came back to my country, and
now
I am looking for a new job. I can assure you to provide my best service.

As you mentioned in the advert that you are living in Brisbane and your child is going to school for 5 hours on weekdays. I
think
the best way to spend my leisure time is to attend an advanced English language course to
improve
my communication and language
skills
.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Kind regards,

James.
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IELTS letter You Have Seen An Advertisement In A Magazine For Someone To Live With A Family For Six Months To Look After Their Child

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  American English
8 paragraphs
181 words
6.5
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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