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You have seen an advertisement feom a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their 2 children youe language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. Explain why you think you would be suitable for the job, say what else you could do for the family, give reasons for wanting the job.

You have seen an advertisement feom a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their 2 children youe language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. Explain why you think you would be suitable for the job, say what else you could do for the family, give reasons for wanting the job. Wyoke
Dear Mr. and Mrs. Smith, I am writing this letter after watching your advertisement in newspaper for hindi tutor. I belive that i would be suitable for this job due to the fact, I had done my post graduate studies in hindi language only. Even, I use to be a professor of hindi in collage for 3 years before I shifted to Australia. In addition, I have been teaching students for last 2 years. I am extremely please to hear that childrens are interested in learning new language and it would be significant to get knowledge about different religions and culture. If you are willing I can provide you whole detail about our traditions and I can surely say that you would enjoy it. I require this occupation because of two reasons. First, I plan to spread my language and second, I am having a number of financial issues know a days. I would be consequently greatful if you could hire me. I look forward to hearing from you soon. Yours FaithfullyJoan
Dear Mr. and Mrs. Smith, I am writing this letter after watching your advertisement in newspaper for
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hindi
tutor.
Did you mean "I believe"?
I belive
that
Did you mean "I"?
i
would be suitable for this job due to the fact, I had done my post graduate studies in
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hindi
language
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
. Even, I
Make sure that 'use to' is correct. For habitual actions in the past or to mean 'accustomed to', use "used to".
use to
be a professor of
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hindi
in collage for 3 years
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
I shifted to Australia.
In addition
, I have been teaching students for last 2 years. I am
extremely
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
please
to hear that
Possible spelling mistake found.
childrens
are interested
in learning new language and it would be significant to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
knowledge about
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
religions and culture. If you are willing I can provide you whole detail about our traditions and I can
surely
say that you would enjoy it. I require this occupation
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
of two reasons.
First
, I plan to spread my language and second, I am having a number of financial issues know
Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean "a day" or simply "days"?
a days
. I would be
consequently
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greatful
if you could hire me. I look forward to hearing from you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
. Yours
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
FaithfullyJoan

IELTS letter You have seen an advertisement feom a couple, who live in Australia, for someone to teach their 2 children youe language for a year. Write a letter to the couple. Explain why you think you would be suitable for the job, say what else you could do for the family, give reasons for wanting the job.

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  American English
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171 words
5.0
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