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You have recentlybeen preselected to start studies at a prestigious University. However, you still need to be admitted. Write an application letter to the Dean. In your letter: •Introduce yourself •Thank him for being considered •Express your interest in the university •Explain why you should be admitted

You have recentlybeen preselected to start studies at a prestigious University. However, you still need to be admitted. Write an application letter to the Dean. In your letter: •Introduce yourself •Thank him for being considered •Express your interest in the university •Explain why you should be admitted oEE03
Dear Sir, Thankyou for the amazing opportunity and your consideration. My name is Rajni and I have applied for the Masters of commerce in your prestigious university. I have been a long time follower of the prosperous activities in the university. My friend is a recent graduate of this varsity. Although I have done a small research on this university before applying for further studies. There is no comparison in terms of quality education, world class professional experience, lessons that students get to learn here. The high rate of campus placements from this university reflects the quality of education one can get by studying here. I am very much keen to be a part of this university I have graduated with 92% overall in the bachelors of commerce and I believe, I have potential to reach great heights of success. I have applied for Masters degree of commerce and I will be priviledged once my admission has been confirmed. This would add great opportunity and will open endevaours for my successful career ahead. Yours sincerely Rajni
Dear Sir,

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Thankyou
for the amazing opportunity and your consideration. My name is
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Rajni
and I have applied for the Masters of commerce in your prestigious
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university
. I have been a long time follower of the prosperous activities in the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
university
. My friend is a recent graduate of this varsity.

Although I have done a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
small
research on this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
university
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
before
applying for
further
studies.

There is no comparison in terms of quality education, world
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
professional experience, lessons that students
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
to learn here. The high rate of campus placements from this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
university
reflects the quality of education one can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
by studying here. I am
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
much keen to be a part of this
Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraph
university


I have graduated with 92%
overall
in the bachelors of commerce and I believe, I have potential to reach great heights of success.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
have applied for
For an academic degree, use "Master’s".
Masters
degree of commerce and I will be
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priviledged
once my admission has
been confirmed
. This would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
add
great opportunity and will open
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endevaours
for my successful career ahead.

Yours
sincerely


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Rajni

IELTS letter You have recentlybeen preselected to start studies at a prestigious University. However, you still need to be admitted. Write an application letter to the Dean. In your letter: •Introduce yourself •Thank him for being considered •Express your interest in the university •Explain why you should be admitted

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175 words
6.0
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