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You have recently visited a museum. Now write a letter to your friend about the museum you have visited. v.6

You have recently visited a museum. Now write a letter to your friend about the museum you have visited. v. 6
Dear Ali, Hope you are doing good. I have something very interesting to share with you and that is why writing to you today. Last Thursday, my dad and I decided to take a trip to the Quetta Museum, a stunning Archaeological Museum, located on Steward Road, Balochistan. He wanted me to learn more about the history of our country and this museum was a perfect place to start with. The museum is full of historical artefacts relating to the period before the separation of Pakistan and India. Among other things, it exhibits the first-ever constitution drafted for our country, the first-ever proposed national anthem that was handwritten by Sir Syed Khan. It also showcases the wax sculptures of many legendary figures and the founding father of our country. Finally, the display figurines from Moenjodaro in Sindh province, pottery pieces and Stone Age artefacts are worth observing. Honestly, it felt amazing. It was as if I time travelled to the pre-partition era! After observing all these artefacts, I am filled with even more respect for our ancestors as they had sacrificed a lot in order to gain independence for us. I say we should catch up some time soon and visit this museum together. Warm wishes, Sam
Dear Ali,

Hope you are doing
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good
. I have something
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very
interesting to share with you and
that is
why writing to you
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today
.

Last Thursday, my dad and I decided to take a trip to the Quetta
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Museum
, a stunning Archaeological
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Museum
, located on Steward Road,
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Balochistan
. He wanted me to learn more about the history of our country and this
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museum
was a perfect place to
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start
with.

The
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museum
is full of historical
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artefacts
relating to the period
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before
the separation of Pakistan and India. Among other things, it exhibits the
first
-ever constitution drafted for our country, the
first
-ever proposed national anthem that was handwritten by Sir
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Syed
Khan. It
also
showcases the wax sculptures of
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many
legendary figures and the founding father of our country.
Finally
, the display figurines from
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Moenjodaro
in
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Sindh
province, pottery pieces and Stone Age
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artefacts
are worth observing.

Honestly
, it felt amazing. It was as if I time travelled to the
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pre-partition
era! After observing all these
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artefacts
, I
am filled
with even more respect for our ancestors as they had sacrificed a lot in order to gain independence for us.

I say we should catch up
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some
time
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soon
and visit this
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museum
together.

Warm wishes,

Sam
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5Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
8Mistakes

IELTS letter You have recently visited a museum. Now write a letter to your friend about the museum you have visited. v. 6

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
206 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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