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A friend has written a letter to you informing about his or her plan to visit your country/city. v.4

A friend has written a letter to you informing about his or her plan to visit your country/city. v. 4
Dear Norton, I am so delighted to receive your letter and writing back to say that I am fascinated to have you in my city in a few days. I cannot wait to receive you at the airport! I guess this is your first-time visit to Italy and I am sure you will enjoy your stay and take back some excellent memories. Once you finish your official tasks in Rome, you can spend a day or two there to enjoy the capital city, especially the Colosseum, Castel Sant'Angelo, St. Peter's Basilica, Trevi Fountain and the Pantheon. You can stay at the Hotel Palladium Palace if your accommodation is not already settled by your office. Then fly directly to Lucca, the city I am residing in. Give me a call before you reach the airport and I will be there. I would like you to stay at my place as long as you wish. If you insist on staying at a hotel, you can try Villa Corte Degli Dei or Hotel Napoleon. We will enjoy local food, watch a movie and do boating. We can enjoy scenic beauty every evening. I would recommend you to bring some warm clothes as the winter is setting in. Do not forget to bring your camera to capture the beauty of the rivers and traditional street views. Also, bring any medicines you take. Looking forward to having you in my city soon. Warm wishes, Marco
Dear Norton,

I am
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so
delighted to receive your letter and writing back to say that I
am fascinated
to have you in my city in a few days. I cannot wait to receive you at the airport!

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
guess this is your
first
-time visit to
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
Italy and
I am sure you will
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enjoy
your stay and take back
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some
excellent memories. Once you finish your official tasks in Rome, you can spend a day or two there to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
enjoy
the capital city,
especially
the Colosseum,
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Castel
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Sant
'Angelo, St. Peter's Basilica,
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Trevi
Fountain and the Pantheon. You can stay at the Hotel Palladium Palace if your accommodation is not already settled by your office.

Then
fly
directly
to Lucca, the city I am residing in. Give me a call
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before
you reach the airport and I will be there. I would like you to stay at my place as long as you wish. If you insist on staying at a hotel, you can try Villa
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Corte
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Degli
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Dei
or Hotel Napoleon. We will
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
enjoy
local food,
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watch
a movie and
The usual collocation for an activity ending in "-ing" is "go" not "do" or "play." Revise: "go boating".
do boating
. We can
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
enjoy
scenic beauty every evening.

I would recommend you to bring
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
warm clothes as the winter is setting in. Do not forget to bring your camera to capture the beauty of the rivers and traditional street views.
Also
, bring any medicines you take.

Looking forward to having you in my city
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
soon
.

Warm wishes,

Marco
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
4Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS letter A friend has written a letter to you informing about his or her plan to visit your country/city. v. 4

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
239 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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