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You have recently started work in a new company. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter ● explain why you changed jobs ● describe your new job ● tell him/her your other news.

You have recently started work in a new company. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter ● explain why you changed jobs ● describe your new job ● tell him/her your other news. woMq
Dear Varun, I hope you and your family are keeping good health. I am writing this letter to tell you that I have changed my job and will be getting married with in few months. I was facing some issues in my previous job. Firstly, the working environment was not conductive for working in an efficient way. Secondly, the top management had started giving extra work over and above my job responsibilities, which had put me under immense mental pressure. As I was looking for a new job, I had given an interview in a new company for the post of general manager accounts and got selected. This company is known for its high employee satisfaction rate. Moreover, it is a good opportunity for me to upgrade myself with respect to my designation as well as my remuneration. I would like to share one good news with you that I have decided to get married in September. I would send to you the detailed invitation for the same and you have to be a part of my happiness without any fail. Yours, Ravi
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Varun
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I hope you and your family are keeping
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good
health. I am writing this letter to
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tell
you that I have
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changed
my
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job
and will be getting married with in few months.

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I
was facing
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some
issues in my previous
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job
.
Firstly
, the working environment was not conductive for working
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in an efficient way
.
Secondly
, the top management had
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started
giving extra work over and above my
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job
responsibilities, which had put me under immense mental pressure.

As I was looking for a new
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
job
, I had
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given
an interview in a new
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company
for the post of general manager accounts and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
selected. This
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
is known
for its high employee satisfaction rate.
Moreover
, it is a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
opportunity for me to upgrade myself with respect to my designation
as well
as my remuneration.

I would like to share one
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
good
news with you that I have decided to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
married in September. I would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
to you the detailed invitation for the same and you
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have to
be a part of my happiness without any fail.

Yours,

Ravi
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IELTS letter You have recently started work in a new company. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter ● explain why you changed jobs ● describe your new job ● tell him/her your other news.

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  American English
7 paragraphs
182 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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