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You have recently bought a vacuum cleaner but it does not work properly.

You have recently bought a vacuum cleaner but it does not work properly. 95rLx
Dear Sir, I am writing to complain about the vacuum cleaner which l bought from your shop. On the 21st of December, l visited one of your local shops in order to buy a vacuum cleaner. Looking around the shop I encountered expected item and asked a shop assistant about it. After I got all information, I decided to purchase it. Although the machine was supposed to clean everything, for the first time I used to clean only carpets. Furthermore, when I tried to use its extra filter it did not work at all. I sent the item to the shop after having been assured one of the assistants that I would be send a refund. In addition, I still have not received one. I would like you to replace the same type of unit and brand. Otherwise, unfortunately, I will force to report this to Customer Service Association responsible for this problem. I look forward to receiving a reply. Yours faithfully, Kate Wilson.
Dear Sir, I am writing to complain about the vacuum cleaner which l
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
bought
from your
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shop
. On the 21st of December, l visited one of your local
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shops
in order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
a vacuum cleaner. Looking around the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shop
I encountered
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expected
item and asked a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shop
assistant about it. After I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
all information, I decided to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
it. Although the machine
was supposed
to clean everything, for the
first
time I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
to clean
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
carpets.
Furthermore
, when I tried to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
its extra filter it did not work at all. I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sent
the item to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shop
after having
been assured
one of the assistants that I would be
Consider using the past participle "sent"?
send
a refund.
In addition
, I
still
have not received one. I would like you to replace the same type of unit and brand.
Otherwise
, unfortunately, I will force to report this to Customer Service Association responsible for this problem. I look forward to receiving a reply. Yours
faithfully
, Kate Wilson.

IELTS letter You have recently bought a vacuum cleaner but it does not work properly.

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  American English
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6.0
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