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You have recently bought a cassete player but it does not wok properly

You have recently bought a cassete player but it does not wok properly 25r8o
Dear Sir, I am writing to complain about the cassette player which I recently bought from you shop. On the 21st of December, I visited one of your local shops in order to buy a cassette player for my son's birthday. Looking around the shop I encountered expected item and asked a shop assistant about it. After I got all information, I decided to purchase it. Two days later my child said to me about the problems of the item. When he used it for the first time, it worked properly. Even he learnt two English songs with the help of it. Next time, when he put on it, its sound was very low. In addition to this, it did not read the cassette. I would like you to replace the same type of unit and brand. Otherwise, unfortunately, l will force to report this to Customer Service Association responsible for this problem. I look forward to receiving a reply. Your faithfully, Kate Wilson.
Dear Sir, I am writing to complain about the cassette player which I recently
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bought
from you
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shop
. On the 21st of December, I visited one of your local
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shops
in order to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
a cassette player for my son's birthday. Looking around the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shop
I encountered
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expected
item and asked a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
shop
assistant about it. After I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
got
all information, I decided to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchase
it. Two days later my child said to me about the problems of the item. When he
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
used
it for the
first
time, it worked
properly
. Even he
Possible spelling mistake. 'learnt' is British English.
learnt
two English songs with the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
of it.
Next
time, when he put on it, its sound was
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very
low.
In addition
to this, it did not read the cassette. I would like you to replace the same type of unit and brand.
Otherwise
, unfortunately, l will force to report this to Customer Service Association responsible for this problem. I look forward to receiving a reply.
Did you mean "Yours"? (complimentary close)
Your
faithfully
, Kate Wilson.

IELTS letter You have recently bought a cassete player but it does not wok properly

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