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You have organized to go on a holiday with your friend.However there was a last minute change on your part. Write a letter to your friend.In your letter: • Tell him/her how much you look forward to the holiday • Explain why you must change your plans • Suggest alternative arrangements

You have organized to go on a holiday with your friend. However there was a last minute change on your part. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: • Tell him/her how much you look forward to the holiday • Explain why you must change your plans • Suggest alternative arrangements KP69
I am writing this letter to notify you of an alteration to the plan for our scheduled trip to New York City. A planned trip to the city that is affectionately known as the Big Apple is one of the top items on our bucket list. We have always wanted to visit the Statue of Liberty and other historical sites in the city. As a result, we have saved some money and make time to realise this dream of ours. However, I regret to inform you that there has been a change to the plan as I have to supervise a vital project at work. It's an unexpected project that coincides with the date of our planned vacation and will require my utmost attention and expertise. Therefore, I suggest we establish another date that would be convenient for both of us. Next month would be a viable alternative, only if it suits you too. I look forward to your revert on an appropriate date for you. My regards to your parents. Yours sincerely, Tobi
I am writing this letter to notify you of an alteration to the plan for our scheduled trip to New York City.

A planned trip to the city
that is
affectionately
known as the
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Big
Apple is one of the top items on our bucket list. We have always wanted to visit the Statue of Liberty and other historical sites in the city.
As a result
, we have saved
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
money and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
time to
Possible spelling mistake. 'realise' is British English.
realise
this dream of ours.

However
, I regret to inform you that there has been a
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
to the plan as I
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
supervise a vital project at work. It's an unexpected project that coincides with the date of our planned vacation and will require my utmost attention and expertise.

Therefore
, I suggest we establish another date that would be convenient for both of us.
Next
month would be a viable alternative,
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
if it suits you too.

I look forward to your revert on an appropriate date for you. My regards to your parents.

Yours
sincerely
,

Possible spelling mistake found.
Tobi

IELTS letter You have organized to go on a holiday with your friend. However there was a last minute change on your part. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter: • Tell him/her how much you look forward to the holiday • Explain why you must change your plans • Suggest alternative arrangements

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  American English
7 paragraphs
173 words
6.0
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