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You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter: say why he/she would not enjoy going to college explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her

You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter: say why he/she would not enjoy going to college explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her VdaK
Dear Aidan, I hope you and your girlfriend are doing great! I was thrilled to receive your letter. We hadn't been in touch for so long. You have asked for my advice whether to join a college or alternatively to get a job. Knowing you well, makes me to believe that getting a job is the best option for you. After recalling our long conversations back in the last summer, I feel that you wouldn't enjoy college life at all. You ' ve always wanted to work after graduating from high school, and feel independent. Furthermore getting a job will prepare you for the outside world and give you unlimitted opportunities. Gaining new skills, managing time and meeting deadlines will enhance your abilities and cultivate your self. The best job for a communicative person like you, is a call center agent. It is a demanding one but it will test you and actually is quite fun. A hell of a ride! I'm waiting to hear your decision most eagerly! Warm wishes, Lily
Dear Aidan,

I hope you and your girlfriend are doing great! I
was thrilled
to receive your letter. We hadn't been in touch for
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so
long.

You have
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asked for
my advice whether to
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join
a college or
alternatively
to
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get
a
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job
. Knowing you well,
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makes
me to believe that getting a
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job
is the best option for you.

After recalling our long conversations back in the last summer, I feel that you wouldn't enjoy college life at all. You
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ve always wanted to work after graduating from high school, and feel independent.
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Furthermore
getting a
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job
will prepare you for the outside world and give you
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unlimitted
opportunities.

Gaining new
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skills
, managing time and meeting deadlines will enhance your abilities and cultivate your self.

The best
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job
for a communicative person like you, is a call center agent. It is a demanding one
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but
it will
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test
you and actually is quite fun. A hell of a ride!

I'm waiting to hear your decision most
eagerly
!

Warm wishes,

Lily
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IELTS letter You recently received a letter from a friend asking for advice about whether to go to college or to try to get a job. You think he/she should get a job. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter: say why he/she would not enjoy going to college explain why getting a job is a good idea for him/her suggest types of job that would be suitable for him/her

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171 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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