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You have just received a letter from one of your close friends, Mai who is now living in Ho Chi Minh City. She is having a difficult decision to make and needs your advice.

You have just received a letter from one of your close friends, Mai who is now living in Ho Chi Minh City. She is having a difficult decision to make and needs your advice. LqeRG
Dear Mai, How are you? I hope you are fine. I received your letter asking for my advice regarding the problem you are facing. I am happy to give you advice. I know that she is having a hard time choosing between going to work or going back to her hometown with her parents. If it were me, I would choose to go back to my hometown with my parents. Because the time I make money is still very long, and the time with my parents is still very short. I think you also miss her very much and look forward to her return there. Or maybe she asked for another job to have time to visit the two of you. As for the tuition fee, she can find online jobs to do part-time to earn extra income. If it's too difficult, I'll be happy to lend you some money to pay for the tuition. I hope she will return to her hometown to reunite with her family and friends because I see that she has not been home for a long time. Don't worry too much about paying the tuition fee, you can go back to the city for 2 weeks to find another job, I see a lot of part-time jobs there. anyway I hope you make a decision that makes you feel good and happy. Hope to hear from you soon. Don't hesitate to contact me if you need help. Best wishes, Tram
Dear Mai,

How are you? I
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hope
you are fine. I received your letter asking for my advice regarding the problem you are facing.
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I
am happy to give you advice.

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I
know that she is having a
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hard
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time
choosing between going to work or going back to her hometown with her parents. If it were me, I would choose to go back to my hometown with my parents.
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Because
the
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time
I
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make
money is
still
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very
long, and the
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time
with my parents is
still
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very
short. I
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think
you
also
miss her
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very
much and look forward to her return there. Or maybe she
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asked for
another
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job
to have
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time
to visit the two of you. As for the tuition fee, she can find online
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jobs
to do part-time to earn extra income. If it's too difficult, I'll be happy to lend you
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some
money to pay for the tuition.

I
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hope
she will return to her hometown to reunite with her family and friends
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because
I
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see
that she has not been home for a long
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time
. Don't worry too much about paying the tuition fee, you can go back to the city for 2 weeks to find another
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job
, I
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see
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a lot of
part-time
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jobs
there.
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anyway
I
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hope
you
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make
a decision that
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makes
you feel
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good
and happy.
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Hope
to hear from you
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soon
. Don't hesitate to contact me if you need
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
.

Best wishes,

Tram
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IELTS letter You have just received a letter from one of your close friends, Mai who is now living in Ho Chi Minh City. She is having a difficult decision to make and needs your advice.

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  American English
6 paragraphs
245 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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