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you have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect

you have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect 6xx2r
Dear Sir or Madam, I have recently bought one of your magazines called Tomorrow Land. I am writing to inform you about the some mistakes in the article relate to my home town Caspian Village. I would be really grateful if you could change the wrong information in this article. It is written in the magazine that Iraq army had invaded some part of our land 500 years ago, and after a while, they have been established the oldest library in the middle east region. Refer to the national cultural heritage publication, you can easily find out that the Sima library is relate to 1000 years ago which has been bulit by Hakhamanesh dynasty. The Sima library is one of the hallmarks of our national heritage that promotes national pride for all people. Hence, It is extremely vital for our local people that foreginers know it well and right. I offer you to check the national cultrual heritage website in order to know precisely about the history of my hometown. I hope you will change the article information at your earliest convenience Yours Faithfully, Alireza Dadashpour
Dear Sir or Madam,

I have recently
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one of your magazines called Tomorrow Land. I am writing to inform you about the
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some
mistakes in the article

relate to my home town Caspian Village.
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I
would be
really
grateful if you could
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change
the
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wrong
information in this article.

It
is written
in the magazine that Iraq army had invaded
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some
part of our land 500 years ago, and after a while, they have
been established
the oldest library

in the
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middle east
region. Refer to the
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national
cultural heritage publication, you can
easily
find out that the
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Sima
library is
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relate
to 1000 years ago which

has been
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bulit
by
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Hakhamanesh
dynasty.

The
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Sima
library is one of the hallmarks of our
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national
heritage that promotes
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national
pride for all
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people
.
Hence
, It is
extremely
vital for our local
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people


that
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foreginers
know it well and right.

I offer you to
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check
the
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national
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cultrual
heritage website in order to know
precisely
about the history of my hometown.

I hope you will
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change
the article information at your earliest convenience

Yours
Faithfully
,

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Alireza
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Dadashpour

IELTS letter you have just read an article in an international travel magazine which contained some information about your town that is incorrect

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  American English
8 paragraphs
185 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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