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You have just finished a two-day course in a college. Write a letter and explain the details of the course. Give suggestions to make the course better.

You have just finished a two-day course in a college. Write a letter and explain the details of the course. Give suggestions to make the course better. m177L
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing this letter to express how much I enjoyed taking the intensive course at your college. I became engrossed to have a puppet making course which is crucial skill at my workplace. I have been grateful with the well-experienced tutors that we have mastered the skill for an intended time. However, I would like to remind you a number of offers to make the inconveniences better that I experienced during the drills. First, although the course lasts for a short time the tutors come to the lessons so late that the participants feel a bit nervouse while waiting the start. As you know most of the participants comprise adults have jobs. They may not have flexible hours for a long time. Secondly, during each practical lesson we face with the shortage of instruments. Usually the participants bring the necessary materials like fibric, pieces of ornament. Unfortunately, during the lessons if there comes to cut or to sew we face with the lack of scissors or needles. It would be really perfect if the college stuff follow the time-management and the class is facilitated with necessary items according to the course syllabus. If you take the suggestions into your consideration and do your action, I hope the endeavour of participants will not be lost, yet accelerate to achieve the result. Thank you for your time and regard. Faithfully, Mekhriban Bayimbetova.
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing this letter to express how much I enjoyed taking the intensive
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
at your college. I became engrossed to have a puppet making
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
which is crucial
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skill
at my workplace.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
have been grateful with the well-experienced tutors that we have mastered the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skill
for an intended time.

However
, I would like to remind you a number of offers to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
the inconveniences better that I experienced during the drills.

First
, although the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
lasts for a short time the tutors
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
to the lessons
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
late that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
participants
feel a bit
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nervouse
while waiting the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
.
“As” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
As
you know most of the
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participants
comprise adults have jobs. They may not have flexible hours for a long time.

Secondly
, during each practical lesson we face with the shortage of instruments.
Usually
the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
participants
bring the necessary materials like
Possible spelling mistake found.
fibric
, pieces of ornament. Unfortunately, during the lessons if there
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
comes
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
cut
or to sew we face with the lack of scissors or needles.

It would be
really
perfect if the college stuff follow the time-management and the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
is facilitated
with necessary items according to the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
syllabus. If you take the suggestions into your consideration and do your action, I hope the
Possible spelling mistake. 'endeavour' is British English.
endeavour
of
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participants
will not
be lost
,
yet
accelerate to achieve the result.

Thank you for your time and regard.

Faithfully
,

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Mekhriban
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Bayimbetova
.
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IELTS letter You have just finished a two-day course in a college. Write a letter and explain the details of the course. Give suggestions to make the course better.

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  American English
9 paragraphs
235 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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