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You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practise in the community hall.

You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practise in the community hall. kYLV2
Dear sir, I'm writting to you about the stove which i had purchased on last week from your shop. On 12th October, i bought a stove ( Model LG T4) with the price is 40$. After few day, i had found out the fire start, which on the left side, didn't work. When i first bought, the stove worked perfectly. Yesterday I turned on to cook my breakfast and it couldn't start. I called at your shop and informed about this sistuation. They said two days they will come to check my stove. From now it had been four days but still nobody come. I'd like you to kindly replace it with the new stove as it still under the warranty period. You can send your sale person at my residence with the same and pick up the old one. I am available in the morning before 11 am. Yours sincerely
Dear sir,

I'm
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writting
to you about the
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stove
which
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i
had
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purchased
on last week from your shop.

On 12th October,
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i
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bought
a
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stove
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(
Model LG T4) with the price is
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40$
. After
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few day
,
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i
had found out the fire
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start
, which on the
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left
side, didn't work. When
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i
first
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bought
, the
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stove
worked
perfectly
. Yesterday I turned on to cook my breakfast and it couldn't
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start
. I called at your shop and informed about this
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sistuation
. They said two days they will
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come
to
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check
my
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stove
. From
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now it
had been four days
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but
still
nobody
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come
.

I'd like you to kindly replace it with the new
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stove
as it
still
under the warranty period. You can
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
your sale person at my residence with the same and pick up the
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old
one. I am available in the morning
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before
11 am.

Yours
sincerely

IELTS letter You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practise in the community hall.

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  American English
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150 words
6.0
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