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You have gone on a trip with your family. Write a letter to your friend describing that trip.

You have gone on a trip with your family. Write a letter to your friend describing that trip. m3wY8
Dear Jenny, I’ve just received your letter today and am delighted to go through its contents. It’s extremely great to tell you that I’m having a wonderful time with my family in Paris. During the past two days, we’ve done many interesting things even though our trip plan for the first day abroad wasn’t so smooth. As I told you before, I couldn’t go to the beach and enjoy surfing as well as sunbathing as expected since it wasn’t sunny enough; but I did this yesterday. Instead, I along with my family, walked around a town, then visited a stunning local market in the centre, which sells highly conspicuous hand-made carpets and hats. What an exciting thing! Somehow, we came across some professional street musicians performing with a variety of instruments. Well, my pal! Do you know how wonderful an evening in Paris is? The place is so magnificent because of the vivid colour and dynamic design of the building. Also, this noon, we enjoyed a lot of delicious dishes at the appealing “Spring” restaurant before hitting the entertainment centre. Now, we’re staying in a lovely hotel and thinking about what to do; specifically, we’re going to a ballet theatre tonight and eating some Crepe cakes. I wish you were here too, and I’m sure you would be partial as I’m. Looking forward to seeing you and catching up on all your news. Please send kisses to parents. Loads of love, Sarah
Dear Jenny,

I’ve
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received your letter
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today
and
am delighted
to go through its contents. It’s
extremely
great to
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tell
you that I’m having a wonderful time with my family in Paris.

During the past two days, we’ve done
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many
interesting things
even though
our trip plan for the
first
day abroad wasn’t
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so
smooth. As I
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told
you
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before
, I couldn’t go to the beach and enjoy surfing
as well
as sunbathing as
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expected
since it wasn’t sunny
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enough
;
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but
I did this yesterday.
Instead
, I along with my family, walked around a town, then visited a stunning local market in the
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centre
, which sells
highly
conspicuous hand-made carpets and hats. What an exciting thing! Somehow, we came across
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some
professional street musicians performing with a variety of instruments.

Well, my pal! Do you know how wonderful an evening in Paris is? The place is
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so
magnificent
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because
of the vivid
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colour
and dynamic design of the building.
Also
, this noon, we enjoyed
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a lot of
delicious dishes at the appealing “Spring” restaurant
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before
hitting the entertainment
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centre
.

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Now
, we’re staying in a lovely hotel and thinking about what to do;
specifically
, we’re going to a ballet
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theatre
tonight and eating
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some
'Crepe' is an imported foreign expression, which originally has a diacritic. Consider using "crêpe"
Crepe
cakes. I wish you were here too, and I’m sure you would be partial as I’m.

Looking forward to seeing you and catching up on all your news.
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Please
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send
kisses to parents.

Loads of
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love
,

Sarah
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IELTS letter You have gone on a trip with your family. Write a letter to your friend describing that trip.

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
241 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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