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You have found a problem with an item which you bought online. Write a letter to the company manager. In your letter, you should: · describe the item · explain the issue · suggest what you expect the manager to do.

You have found a problem with an item which you bought online. Write a letter to the company manager. In your letter, you should: · describe the item · explain the issue · suggest what you expect the manager to do. bDkPg
Dear Sir, I am writing this letter to bring into your consideration, the mobile that I ordered from your website is damaged and is malfunctioning. I purchased a cellular phone on 20th May worth rupees 20000 of Samsung brand. I ordered a blue colored phone with the screen guard because it looks more attractive and elegant with it. Besides this, I also ordered a charger and a wireless Bluetooth headphones as I was getting these two things in discounted price and the deal was very exclusive. After opening the box, I found the screen was broken and the air pods of the Bluetooth were detached from their original position. In addition to this, I received a whited colored cell phone even after mentioning clearly. Therefore, after seeing these issues I am very disappointed with your service. As a corrective action, I would recommend you to either get my product replaced or refund my money. It will be of tremendous help if you can take an immediate action on this otherwise I will have to stop suggesting about this site to my friends. I hope you take a quick action on this consequence. I look forward to your reply. Yours Sincerely, Sanmeet
Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to bring into your consideration, the mobile that I ordered from your website
is damaged
and is malfunctioning.

I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchased
a cellular phone on 20th May worth rupees 20000 of Samsung brand.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
ordered a blue colored phone with the screen guard
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
because
it looks more attractive

and elegant with it.
Besides
this, I
also
ordered a charger and a wireless Bluetooth headphones as I was getting these two things in discounted price and the deal was
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
exclusive.

After opening the box, I found the screen
was broken
and the air pods of the Bluetooth
were detached
from their original position.
In addition
to this, I received a whited colored cell phone even after mentioning
clearly
.
Therefore
, after seeing these issues I am
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
disappointed with your service.

As a corrective action, I would recommend you to either
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
my product replaced or refund my money. It will be of tremendous
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
if you can take an immediate action on this
otherwise
I will
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
stop
suggesting about this site to my friends. I hope you take a quick action on this consequence.

I look forward to your reply.

Yours
Sincerely
,

Possible spelling mistake found.
Sanmeet

IELTS letter You have found a problem with an item which you bought online. Write a letter to the company manager. In your letter, you should: · describe the item · explain the issue · suggest what you expect the manager to do.

Letter
  American English
8 paragraphs
200 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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