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send a message to your friend who you haven't talken for a long time

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Dear Naomi, I hope you are doing well during this time. First of all, I would like to send a message to say hello to you. Second, if you would like to pass me jobs for our new academic year. Please feel free to send me any works you need to make for our children. I have learn a lot of things last year that i think i can use for my knowledge. i hope you are happy with your position this year. i wish we can make an amazing team with our heart beats.

Dear Naomi,

I hope you are doing well during this time. This phrase is redundant. Consider using "first".First
First of all
, I would like to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :transmit
send
 a message to say hello to you. Second, if you would like to pass me jobs for our new academic year.

This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :satisfy
Please
 feel free to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :transmit
send
 me any works you need to This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createconstructmanufactureproduce
make
 for our children.

I have Use past participle here: "learned", "learnt".learnedlearnt
learn
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:a plethora ofa number ofnumerous
a lot of
 things last year that Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.I
i
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :reckonassumebelieveconsider
think
Did you mean "I"?I
i
 can This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :exploit
use
 for my knowledge. Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.I
i
 hope you are happy with your position this year. Is this the personal pronoun "I"? It is spelled uppercase.I
i
 wish we can This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :createconstructmanufactureproduce
make
 an amazing team with our heart beats. 

IELTS letter send a message to your friend who you haven't talken for a long time

Letter

American English

4 paragraphs

95 words

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less than 250 words in Task 2
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4.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 5.5

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.0

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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