Search
Vocabularying
Listening
Reading
1. Academic
2. General
Writing
1. IELTSWriting Checker
2. IELTS Writing Samples
Speaking

Do you want to improve your writing? Try our new evaluation service and get detailed feedback.

You have bought a new camera but when you returned to home you found it is not work.

You have bought a new camera but when you returned to home you found it is not work. 3blPY

Dear Sir/Madam My name is Iroda Isroilova and I am writing to your regarding a Nokia camera that I bought at your department store on Dunhill Road, Dewsbary, on that 5th October. The camera seemed to work fine in the shop. However, upon returning home, it become clear that the shutter mechanism was not functioning properly. In addition to this, there was a small scratch on the lens. I therefore returned to the shop the following day, on the 6th October and spoke to the company representative about the issue. I left the camera with the asistan and they assured that they would look into the problem with a view to repairing the camera and get back to me a few days later. However, it has now been one week and when I attached the shop again they said that the the camera has still not been fixed and they do not know how long it will be. As I am sure you will understand it is not acceptable to be waiting for such a long time for it to be prepared. I would therefore like to request that I be given full refund should I not receive the repaired camera by the end of the week I look forward to hearing from you Yours faithfully Iroda Isroilova

Dear Sir/Madam

My name is Possible spelling mistake found.RoadBroadIronIRAIowaRod
Iroda
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).Isroilova, and
Isroilova and
 I am writing to your regarding a Nokia You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcamcorder
camera
 that I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :purchased
bought
 at your department store on Possible spelling mistake found.DunghillDun hill
Dunhill
 Road, Possible spelling mistake found.Duisburg
Dewsbary
, on that 5th October.

The You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcamcorder
camera
 seemed to work fine in the shop. However
, upon returning home, it Did you mean "becomes"?becomes
become
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :apparent
clear
 that the shutter mechanism was not functioning properly
. In addition
 to this, there was a This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:tiny
small
 scratch on the lens.

I therefore
 returned to the shop the following day, on the 6th October and spoke to the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :enterprisecorporation
company
 representative about the issue. I This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :departed
left
 the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcamcorder
camera
 with the Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).asistan, and
asistan and
 they assured that they would look into the problem with a view to repairing the You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcamcorder
camera
 and This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :acquire
get
 back to me a few days later.

However
, it has This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :nowadays
now
 been one week and when I attached the shop again they said that Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only "the" or "the" is left.the
the the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcamcorder
camera
 has still
 not been Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).fixed, and
fixed and
 they do not know how long it will be.

As I am sure you will understand it is not acceptable to be waiting for such a long time for it to be prepared
. I would therefore
 like to request that I be This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :accorded
given
 full refund should I not receive the repaired You use this word too often, consider replacing it withcamcorder
camera
 by the This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :expiration
end
 of the Please add a punctuation mark at the end of paragraphweek.week!week?week:week,week;
week


I look forward to hearing from you

Yours faithfully


Possible spelling mistake found.RoadBroadIronIRAIowaRod
Iroda
Possible spelling mistake found.
Isroilova