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You have been asked to organise a social event for your company. Write an email to your colleagues. In the email say: • What suggestions have been made • What you think about the suggestions • What you have decided to do.

You have been asked to organise a social event for your company. Write an email to your colleagues. In the email say: • What suggestions have been made • What you think about the suggestions • What you have decided to do. 8o1V
Dear Colleagues, I am writing this to letter to express my suggestions towards the annual function which is going to be organised forth month. I had brain storm with few other managers and we decided on the possible solutions to organise annual fare which are given below. I have made possible three ideas, among which one idea is to organise event in our office auditorium, second is hiring a banquet hall and final idea is to book a hotel. The above each solutions has their own merits and demerits. As organizing annual event in office auditorium may save us money but it is not spacious enough to fit everyone from all departments of office hence we need to drop this idea. Booking a hotel is a good option but it probably exceeds our budget hence in my opinion arranging event in a banquet hall is more efficient then any other option as we are getting corporate discount in nearby banquet hall which is minutes away from office. This option will help us save time and money and even cattering at this banquet hall is delicious as what I heard from other colleagues. Although, we decided to go for a banquet hall but I like to hear any other suggestions from you all. Please feel free to reach out to me with your valuable opinions. Regards Thakur Aashish Singh
Dear Colleagues,

I am writing this to letter to express my suggestions towards the annual function which is going to be
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organised
forth month. I had brain storm with few
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other
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managers and
we decided on the possible solutions to
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organise
annual fare which are
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given
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I
have made possible three
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ideas
, among which one
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idea
is to
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organise
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event
in our
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office
auditorium, second is hiring a
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banquet
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hall
and final
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idea
is to book a hotel.

The above each
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solutions
has their
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own
merits and demerits. As
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organizing
annual
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event
in
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office
auditorium may save us money
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but
it is not spacious
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enough
to fit everyone from all departments of
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office
hence
we need to drop this
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idea
. Booking a hotel is a
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good
option
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but
it
probably
exceeds our budget
hence
in my opinion arranging
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event
in a
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banquet
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hall
is more efficient
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then
any
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other
option as we are getting corporate discount in nearby
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banquet
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hall
which is minutes away from
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office
. This option will
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help
us save time and money and even
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cattering
at this
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banquet
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hall
is delicious as what I heard from
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other
colleagues.

Although, we decided to go for a
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banquet
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hall
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but
I like to hear any
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other
suggestions from you all.
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Please
feel free to reach out to me with your valuable opinions.

Regards

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Thakur
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Aashish
Singh

IELTS letter You have been asked to organise a social event for your company. Write an email to your colleagues. In the email say: • What suggestions have been made • What you think about the suggestions • What you have decided to do.

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227 words
6.0
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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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