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You have a full-time job and you are also doing a part-time evening course. You now find that you cannot continue the course

You have a full-time job and you are also doing a part-time evening course. You now find that you cannot continue the course Bk1d
Dear Mr John, I am enrolled in evening course offered by you for advance computer programming. I am writing this letter to inform you that as much as I wanted to continue the course, I won't be able to do so. I've enjoyed the course thoroughly and the course has also helped me in building a foundation in programming on the contrary recently I was offered to lead a bigger project in my company and I will have to spend some extra working hours to make sure that I am on top of the project. Not only this new project is exciting on the contrary this will also help me grow professionally as I am getting a chance to lead a team now. I hope you understand my concerns. Since we are in just middle of the course and I would not ask for a refund as that will not be beneficial for you, would it be possible for you to adjust the remaining hours so that I will be able to continue the course once I get some time for it. I look forward to your favorable response. Yours sincerely, Adam
Dear Mr John,

I
am enrolled
in evening
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
offered by you for advance computer programming. I am writing this letter to inform you that as much as I wanted to continue the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
, I won't be able to do
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
.

Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
've enjoyed the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
thoroughly
and the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
has
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
helped
me in building a foundation in programming
on the contrary
recently I
was offered
to lead a bigger project in my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
and I will
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
have to
spend
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
extra working hours to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
sure that I am on top of the project. Not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
this new project is exciting
on the contrary
this will
also
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
me grow
professionally
as I am getting a chance to lead a team
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
. I hope you understand my concerns.

Since we are in
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
just
middle of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
and I would not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
ask for
a refund as that will not be beneficial for you, would it be possible for you to adjust the remaining hours
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that I will be able to continue the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
once I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
get
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
time for it.

I look forward to your favorable response.

Yours
sincerely
,

Adam

IELTS letter You have a full-time job and you are also doing a part-time evening course. You now find that you cannot continue the course

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
191 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 6.5
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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