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You have a full time job and are also doing a part time evening course. You now find that you can not continue the course. Write a letter to your tutor. In your letter, describe the situation explain why you cannot continue at this time say what action you would like to take

You have a full time job and are also doing a part time evening course. You now find that you can not continue the course. Write a letter to your tutor. In your letter, describe the situation explain why you cannot continue at this time say what action you would like to take kNwR
Dear Sir, I am writing this letter to inform you that I will not be able to attend the evening course from monday onwards. I am working in a company and they have given me a promotion to be a manager in the Hr department. However, it comes along with a clause that i should be working as a full time employee. This job has been my dream and I have been working all the way long to acheive this level. I took up this course so that it could be additional benefit for me to reach this heights. This was an unexpected promotion that I have received in such short time in my department and I am the youngest person to acheive it in this short time. I request you to give me some additional information, whether I could change my course to the weekend and complete it. If not are there any other alternative for me to complete the course without attending the class during the week day. Yours Sincerely, Mike
Dear Sir,

I am writing this letter to inform you that I will not be able to attend the evening
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course
from
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monday
onwards. I am working in a
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
company and
they have
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
given
me a promotion to be a manager in the Hr department.
However
, it
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
comes
along with a clause that
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i
should be working as a full time employee.

This job has been my dream and I have been working all the way long to
Possible spelling mistake found.
acheive
this level. I took up this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
that it could be additional benefit for me to reach
Did you mean "these"?
this
heights. This was an unexpected promotion that I have received in such short time in my
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
department and
I am the youngest person to
Possible spelling mistake found.
acheive
it in this short time.

I request you to give me
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
additional information, whether I could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
change
my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
to the weekend and complete it. If not are there any other alternative for me to complete the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
without attending the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
class
during the week day.

Yours
Sincerely
,

Mike

IELTS letter You have a full time job and are also doing a part time evening course. You now find that you can not continue the course. Write a letter to your tutor. In your letter, describe the situation explain why you cannot continue at this time say what action you would like to take

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