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You have a friend who lives in a different country. You will organise a party soon and have thought to use a foreign recipe. Write a letter to the friend asking for a recipe from his/her country for the party you are organizing. v.2

You have a friend who lives in a different country. You will organise a party soon and have thought to use a foreign recipe. Write a letter to the friend asking for a recipe from his/her country for the party you are organizing. v. 2
Dear Neha, Hope you are doing great. I still miss my time with your children who are so adorable and amiable. I must say I had a great time with you last summer. Today I am writing to ask you for a recipe that I am planning to include in a party menu. Recently I have moved to a new apartment at Utica, a city in the Mohawk Valley, New York and I have a plan to invite some friends and neighbours to a party I am thinking to hold in September. It would be a dinner party and I will invite around 25 guests. Many of my friends are from India and I am planning to add a special Indian food. I am so fond of your Hyderabadi Biryani, you make it really special, and would like you to provide me with the recipe. I have tried it several times but never had the glimpse of the magnificent aroma and taste that you can bring in. Would you please send me detailed instructions, ingredient list and cooking method you employ for the celestial Hyderabadi Biryani you make? I want to give the Indian guests a fabulous experience of the dinner and invite some neighbours to taste it to give an impression of how Indian cuisines can win their stomach and heart! Warm wishes, Raima
Dear
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Neha
,

Hope you are doing great. I
still
miss my time with your children who are
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so
adorable and amiable. I
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must
say I had a great time with you last summer.
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Today
I am writing to ask you for a recipe that I am planning to include
Unless you mean "in a political party," the usual preposition for a party is "at." Did you mean, "at a party"?
in a party
menu.

Recently I have
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moved
to a new apartment at Utica, a city in the Mohawk Valley, New York and I have a plan to invite
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some
friends and
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neighbours
to a party I am thinking to hold in September. It would be a dinner party and I will invite around 25 guests.
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Many
of my friends are from
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India and
I am planning to
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add
Uncountable nouns are usually not used with an indefinite article. Use simply "special Indian food".
a special Indian food
. I am
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so
fond of your
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Hyderabadi
Biryani, you
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make
it
really
special, and would like you to provide me with the recipe. I have tried it several times
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but
never had the glimpse of the magnificent aroma and taste that you can bring in. Would you
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please
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send
me detailed instructions, ingredient list and cooking method you employ for the celestial
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Hyderabadi
Biryani you
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make
?

I want to give the Indian guests a fabulous experience of the dinner and invite
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some
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neighbours
to taste it to give an impression of how Indian cuisines can win their stomach and heart!

Warm wishes,

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Raima
1Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
9Mistakes

IELTS letter You have a friend who lives in a different country. You will organise a party soon and have thought to use a foreign recipe. Write a letter to the friend asking for a recipe from his/her country for the party you are organizing. v. 2

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
224 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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