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As part of a student social survey project, you are organising a group to visit a historical exhibition in a small town. Write a letter asking for information regarding such things as the contents of the exhibition, and the dates of its opening and closing, and if there are any discounts available. v.6

As part of a student social survey project, you are organising a group to visit a historical exhibition in a small town. Write a letter asking for information regarding such things as the contents of the exhibition, and the dates of its opening and closing, and if there are any discounts available. v. 6
Dear Sir or Madam, I am about to organise a small group of students to visit the historical exhibition in your town in an effort to encourage them to participate in different kinds of social survey projects and learn new things. So, I would request some information to finalise the arrangement. Needless to say, this kind of participation would help these young students to understand the types of problems and the prospect of a society in which they live. But, before visiting that historical exhibition, I could surely use some information from your part. For example, information, like what kinds of contents or items would be displayed at the exhibition, and what historical period or era those historical items belong to, would be highly appreciated. Besides, I would also love to get some specific information about the dates of its opening and closing along with its hours of operation. Finally, I could also use some information on whether there is any discount available for a group of 16. So, I would be highly obliged if you could please provide me with these details at your earliest convenience so that I am able to start making the transport and accommodation arrangements in advance. Yours faithfully, James Collin
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am about to
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organise
a
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small
group of students to visit the
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historical
exhibition in your town in an effort to encourage them to participate in
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different
kinds of social survey projects and learn new things.
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So
, I would request
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some
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information
to
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finalise
the arrangement.

Needless to say, this kind of participation would
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help
these young students to understand the types of problems and the prospect of a society in which they
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live
.
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But
,
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before
visiting that
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historical
exhibition, I could
surely
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use
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some
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information
from your part.
For example
,
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information
, like what kinds of contents or items would
be displayed
at the exhibition, and what
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historical
period or era those
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historical
items belong to, would be
highly
appreciated.
Besides
, I would
also
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love
to
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get
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some
specific
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information
about the dates of its opening and closing along with its hours of operation.
Finally
, I could
also
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use
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some
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information
on whether there is any discount available for a group of 16.

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So
, I would be
highly
obliged if you could
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please
provide me with these
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details
at your earliest convenience
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so
that I am able to
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start
making the transport and accommodation arrangements in advance.

Yours
faithfully
,

James Collin
6Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
9Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes

IELTS letter As part of a student social survey project, you are organising a group to visit a historical exhibition in a small town. Write a letter asking for information regarding such things as the contents of the exhibition, and the dates of its opening and closing, and if there are any discounts available. v. 6

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
205 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
  • Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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    One main idea per paragraph
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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    Support main points with an explanation and then an example
  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.0
  • Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
  • Answer all parts of the question
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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