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You got a small object from the soil and you think it has some historical value. Write to the museum to give information about it - Describe the object - Explain how you get it - Ask information about its value

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Dear Sir, This is to inform you that I got a old pistol from my backyard and I think that it has some historical value. This pistol is in black colour and very similar to modern day service pistol used by indian police force. It has very narrow and long nozzle and small in size, which bring this precious item very convenient. I found this when I was digging land for swimming pool in our house backyard, which I planning from last one year. I think it has some historical value as my great grandfathers were freedom fighters and might be it was digged to hide from britishers as that time, as britishers were continuously searching the house of freedom fighters in order to pressed a voice against them. I also need information about its value, I think this belongs to nation and this old pistol deserve to be in museum. As your museum is well known to preserve these kind of old and antiques which have some historical importance in our history. Thanks
Dear Sir,

This is to inform you that I
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historical value as my great grandfathers were freedom fighters and might be it was
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this belongs to nation and this
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deserve to be in museum. As your museum is well known to preserve
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IELTS letter You got a small object from the soil and you think it has some historical value. Write to the museum to give information about it - Describe the object - Explain how you get it - Ask information about its value

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