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You eat at your college cafeteria every lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements. • Explain what you like about the cafeteria • Say what is wrong with it • Suggest how it could be improved

Dear Mr. Smith, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with sitting capacity in the cafeteria in our college. I am so grateful that we have a service for well maintain and proper hygienic cafeteria from where I eat or drink during lunch time on daily basis. Food is really good though. I was dissatisfied to find out that most of the time I can not find a place to sit there. There are only few chairs which are most of the time have been occupied by seniors. Due to this reason, the canteen gets overcrowded. I would suggest that by either provide enormous chairs or lunch break will not be held for all sections at a time. Any of these actions will provide a relevant result. I would appreciate it if you could look into this matter at your earliest convenience. I look forward to hearing from you Kind regards, Karamjeet Kalra
Dear Mr. Smith,

I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with sitting capacity in the cafeteria in our college.

I am
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grateful that we have a service for well maintain and proper hygienic cafeteria from where I eat or drink during lunch
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time
on daily basis. Food is
really
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good
though.

I
was dissatisfied
to find out that most of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
I can not find a place to sit there. There are
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
only
few chairs which are most of the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
have
been occupied
by seniors. Due to this reason, the canteen
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
gets
overcrowded.

I would suggest that by either provide enormous chairs or lunch break will not
be held
for all sections at a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
time
. Any of these actions will provide a relevant result. I would appreciate it if you could look into this matter at your earliest convenience.

I look forward to hearing from you

Kind regards,

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Karamjeet
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Kalra

IELTS letter You eat at your college cafeteria every lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements. • Explain what you like about the cafeteria • Say what is wrong with it • Suggest how it could be improved

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6.0
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