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You eat at your college cafeteria every lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine. In your letter, explain what you like about the cafeteria say what is wrong with it suggest how it could be improved

You eat at your college cafeteria every lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine. In your letter, explain what you like about the cafeteria say what is wrong with it suggest how it could be improved awy3o
Dear Mr. John, I am Ms. Shah, who visited your store and purchased a new Dell Laptop last week. However, I am writing this letter to share my concern about the laptop as it doesn't even switch on this week. Moreover, is it difficult for me to reach you, as, I live in a small city which is approximately two hours self drive from your place. I acknowledge that the laptop had being working as expected last week as I could complete my lengthy project in a very short course of time. I had turned it off on Friday after working on it for more than 5 hours continuously. Before leaving, I ensured that the battery is charged for next time use. However, when I tried to switch it on, on Monday, I couldn't. Although I have limited resources here, I went to a computer hardware engineer who was unable to diagnose the issue with this device. Therefore, I request you to send an expert from your company at my address or arrange a pick-up service for my laptop. Also, I insist that you consider my case on high priority as, I am expecting another assignment in the following week. I look forward for your cooperation. Thanks and regards, Ms. Shah.
Dear Mr. John,

I am Ms. Shah, who visited your store and
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purchased
a new Dell
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Laptop
last week.
However
, I am writing this letter to share my concern about the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
laptop
as it doesn't even switch on this week.
Moreover
, is it difficult for me to reach you, as, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
live
in a
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small
city which is approximately two hours self drive from your place.

I acknowledge that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
laptop
had being working as
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
expected
last week as I could complete my lengthy project in a
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
very
short course of time. I had turned it off on Friday after working on it for more than 5 hours
continuously
.
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
Before
leaving, I ensured that the battery
is charged
for
next
time
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
use
.
However
, when I tried to switch it on, on Monday, I couldn't. Although I have limited resources here, I went to a computer hardware engineer who was unable to diagnose the issue with this device.

Therefore
, I request you to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
an expert from your
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
company
at my address or arrange a pick-up service for my
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
laptop
.
Also
, I insist that you consider my case on high priority as, I am expecting another assignment in the following week.

I look forward for your cooperation.

Thanks and regards,

Ms. Shah.
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IELTS letter You eat at your college cafeteria every lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine. In your letter, explain what you like about the cafeteria say what is wrong with it suggest how it could be improved

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  American English
7 paragraphs
211 words
6.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 7.0
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