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You eat at your college cafeteria every lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine. In your letter, - explain what you like about the cafeteria - say what is wrong with it - suggest how it could be improved

You eat at your college cafeteria every lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine. In your letter, - explain what you like about the cafeteria - say what is wrong with it - suggest how it could be improved GMdG2
Dear Sir or Madam, I would like to share with you my opinion about the cafeteria of our college. I have lunch there every day and find it very nice and cozy place, where you can not only eat, but also spend nice time with friends of yours. Moreover, quite reasonable price for food and plenty of room between tables are also great advantages of this place. However, I am not happy with low vatiety of dishes and drinks. Almost all menu is junk food, and there is not enough diet and balanced meal. Additionally, I want to note the low diversification of drinks. The cafeteria serves only coffee and tea, but I would prefer to take some fresh drinks also. Let me propose some ideas about how to improve this place. Firstly, I think that it would be a good idea to add some vegeterian dishes, as many student are vegans. Secondly, a number of students, like myself, would be happy to see a cooler with fresh juice and drinks there. Yours faithfully, Taylor.
Dear Sir or Madam,

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diet and balanced meal.
Additionally
, I want to note the low diversification of
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drinks
. The cafeteria serves
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coffee and tea,
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there.

Yours
faithfully
,

Taylor.
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IELTS letter You eat at your college cafeteria every lunchtime. However, you think it needs some improvements. Write a letter to the college magazine. In your letter, - explain what you like about the cafeteria - say what is wrong with it - suggest how it could be improved

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6.0
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