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You eat at college cafeteria every lunch time. However, you think it needs some improvement. write a letter to college magazine – explain what I like the most about cafeteria - What is wrong with it - Suggest how could it be improved

You eat at college cafeteria every lunch time. However, you think it needs some improvement. write a letter to college magazine – explain what I like the most about cafeteria - What is wrong with it - Suggest how could it be improved EPlM
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my opinion about our college cafeteria. I have my lunch here on daily basis. Fortunately, our cafeteria has relaxing vibe and ambience. I also find that there is plethora of food served when compared to other colleges. If there were no new delicacies available everyday, it would be boring! The problem is that, I feel our cafeteria requires few enhancements. As most students tend to have their meal in cafeteria, I often find the place dirty. Although we have different choices in food, most of them are high-priced for any student to buy. Recently, there have been number of complaints reported to student’s union regarding the behavior of cafeteria staff. Most students would agree that the staffs working in canteen are not friendly. As a student, I would suggest in having this place cleaned at regular intervals in order to achieve the hygiene standards. Prices can be reduced with consultation of student union members and college management. Staffs can also be trained to handle the scholars more friendly. I Hope you would consider my suggestions, Yours sincerely, Nancy
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to express my opinion about our college
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cafeteria
. I have my lunch here on daily basis.
Fortunately
, our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cafeteria
has relaxing vibe and ambience. I
also
find that there is plethora of food served when compared to other colleges. If there were no new delicacies available
'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean "every day"?
everyday
, it would be boring!

The problem is that, I feel our
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cafeteria
requires few enhancements. As most
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
tend to have their meal in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cafeteria
, I
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
often
find the place dirty. Although we have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
different
choices in food, most of them are high-priced for any
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
student
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
buy
. Recently, there have been number of complaints reported to
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
student’s
union regarding the behavior of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
cafeteria
staff. Most
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
students
would
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
that the staffs working in canteen are not friendly.

As a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
student
, I would suggest in having this place cleaned at regular intervals in order to achieve the hygiene standards. Prices can be
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
reduced
with consultation of
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
student
union members and college management. Staffs can
also
be trained
to handle the scholars more friendly.

I Hope you would consider my suggestions,

Yours
sincerely
,

Nancy
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IELTS letter You eat at college cafeteria every lunch time. However, you think it needs some improvement. write a letter to college magazine – explain what I like the most about cafeteria - What is wrong with it - Suggest how could it be improved

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7 paragraphs
186 words
6.5
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