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You can no longer attend you gym class next month. Write a letter to your instructor Say what lesson you attend Explain why you can’t go Tell them that you’ll be back soon and say what you have enjoyed about their classes.

You can no longer attend you gym class next month. Write a letter to your instructor Say what lesson you attend Explain why you can’t go Tell them that you’ll be back soon and say what you have enjoyed about their classes. DNoym
Hi Claudia This is Fiona from your Zumba class (the one at the back, who has to sit down sometimes! ). Just a quick note to let you know that I’ll have to miss a few classes in December but will be back in Jan. I’ve really enjoyed coming to your classes every week – it gets me out of the house in the winter and I love the way you just let us do as much as we want without putting pressure on us to get all the complicated moves right. There’s a lovely atmosphere in the class and I’ve been feeling much fitter and healthier since I started going regularly. I’m afraid I won’t be able to come for the rest of the term though – my son’s swimming classes have changed and now they clash with the Zumba timetable. It’s a 30-minute drive, so I won’t make it in time for 7. Luckily it’s only for December, and I’ll definitely be back in January with some New Year Resolutions! Hope you have a great Christmas, See you soon Fiona
Hi Claudia

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New Year Resolutions!

Hope you have a great Christmas,

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Fiona

IELTS letter You can no longer attend you gym class next month. Write a letter to your instructor Say what lesson you attend Explain why you can’t go Tell them that you’ll be back soon and say what you have enjoyed about their classes.

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