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You bought a new HD television last week. At first, it seemed to work perfectly but after a few hours a line appeared across the TV and the sound seemed a little strange. You cannot take the TV back to the shop so you have decided to write to them. v.4

You bought a new HD television last week. At first, it seemed to work perfectly but after a few hours a line appeared across the TV and the sound seemed a little strange. You cannot take the TV back to the shop so you have decided to write to them. v. 4
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to notify you of the problem I am having with the television that I purchased from your store on 29th March 2020. It was just fine when I checked it in the store but it started acting strangely and I am hoping you would send someone to check it. I bought a 48 inch Samsung HD Flat FH4003 TV from your showroom in Author Street, Leevart area, on 29th March 2020. The TV worked fine for the first few hours and then suddenly started erratic behaviours! I cannot bring it to your store to claim my warranty because my car is in the repairing shop and I have an important exam next week. A thin dark line appears on the screen and it goes away after a while. This happens every time I start the TV. The sound of the TV was superb at the beginning but it sounds strange now. People's voice has become robotic and I am sure it is not related to sound-settings. It is quite disappointing to have a faulty product, especially from a reputed brand. I would request you to send someone to my place and have the television checked. Afterwards, please provide me with a new one of the same model and make sure this one has no issue! Yours faithfully, David Crown
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to notify you of the problem I am having with the television that I
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purchased
from your store on 29th March 2020. It was
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just
fine when I
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checked
it in the store
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but
it
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started
acting
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strangely and
I am hoping you would
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send
someone to
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check
it.

I
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bought
a
When a number forms part of an adjectival compound, use a hyphen: "48-inch"
48 inch
Samsung HD Flat FH4003 TV from your showroom in Author Street,
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Leevart
area, on 29th March 2020. The TV worked fine for the
first
few hours and then
suddenly
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started
erratic
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behaviours
! I cannot bring it to your store to claim my warranty
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because
my car is in the repairing shop and I have an
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important
exam
next
week. A thin dark line appears on the screen and it goes away after a while. This happens every time I
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start
the TV. The sound of the TV was superb at the beginning
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but
it sounds strange
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now
.
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People
's voice has become
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
robotic and
I am sure it is not related to sound-settings.

It is quite disappointing to have a faulty product,
especially
from a reputed brand. I would request you to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
someone to my place and have the television
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
checked
. Afterwards,
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please
provide me with a new one of the same model and
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
make
sure this one has no issue!

Yours
faithfully
,

David Crown
3Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
5Mistakes

IELTS letter You bought a new HD television last week. At first, it seemed to work perfectly but after a few hours a line appeared across the TV and the sound seemed a little strange. You cannot take the TV back to the shop so you have decided to write to them. v. 4

Letter
  American English
6 paragraphs
225 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.0
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 5.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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