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You bought a new HD television last week. At first, it seemed to work perfectly but after a few hours a line appeared across the TV and the sound seemed a little strange. You cannot take the TV back to the shop so you have decided to write to them. v.1

You bought a new HD television last week. At first, it seemed to work perfectly but after a few hours a line appeared across the TV and the sound seemed a little strange. You cannot take the TV back to the shop so you have decided to write to them. v. 1
Dear Mr Bruce, Three days ago I purchased an LG smart television from your store. I was excited when I bought it from your store but very disappointed to find that only after a few hours, the product malfunctioned. I am sure it was poorly produced and I am hoping you would send someone to my house to check it and then replace it. In relation to the specifics of the order, I purchased a 54-inch LG smart HD TV from your brand shop located in the Tandridge District on August 14th using my Visa credit card. The order number is 5874210 and I am attaching a copy of my receipt. The issue with the TV is that a black line appears across the TV screen. Though it disappears after a while, it emerges again if the TV is on for a couple of hours. Moreover, the sound quality is strange and it has nothing to do with the audio settings. The TV is now unusable and I’m sure this is a manufacturing flaw. As a solution, and because I really like the functionality of this television, I am hoping that you will agree to send someone to my house to check it and then replace it with a new one. Otherwise, I would like a full refund. Thank you for giving the matter your attention and I hope to hear your reply soon. Yours faithfully, Isabella Evelyn
Dear Mr Bruce,

Three days ago I
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purchased
an LG smart television from your store. I
was excited
when I
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bought
it from your store
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but
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very
disappointed to find that
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only
after a few hours, the product malfunctioned. I am sure it was
poorly
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produced and
I am hoping you would
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send
someone to my
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house
to
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check
it and then replace it.

In relation to the specifics of the order, I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
purchased
a 54-inch LG smart HD TV from your brand shop located in the Tandridge District on August 14th using my Visa credit card. The order number is
Use a comma before 'and' if it connects two independent clauses (unless they are closely connected and short).
5874210 and
I am attaching a copy of my receipt.

The issue with the TV is that a black line appears across the TV screen. Though it disappears after a while, it emerges again if the TV is on for a couple of hours.
Moreover
, the sound quality is strange and it has nothing to do with the audio settings. The TV is
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
now
unusable and I’m sure this is a manufacturing flaw.

As a solution, and
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because
I
really
like the functionality of this television, I am hoping that you will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
agree
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
send
someone to my
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
house
to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
check
it and then replace it with a new one.
Otherwise
, I would like a full refund.

Thank you for giving the matter your attention and I hope to hear your reply
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soon
.

Yours
faithfully
,

Isabella Evelyn
2Linking words, meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Repeated words, meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
2Mistakes
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IELTS letter You bought a new HD television last week. At first, it seemed to work perfectly but after a few hours a line appeared across the TV and the sound seemed a little strange. You cannot take the TV back to the shop so you have decided to write to them. v. 1

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  American English
8 paragraphs
237 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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Lexical Resource: 6.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.5
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