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You are working in a company. You would like to join a training course related to you work.Write aletter to your employer.In your letter describe what course you would like to do. How this course might help in your work.Suggest suitable time for you to do this course

You are working in a company. You would like to join a training course related to you work. Write aletter to your employer. In your letter describe what course you would like to do. How this course might help in your work. Suggest suitable time for you to do this course q532a
Dear Sir or Madam, I am Zulfiya who is an English teacher to your school. I am glad that the department is to hold an English training course. I am sure it is of great help to our English skills and take a high level CEFR certificate. I am noticed that the time of the training course is at 9 o'clock on Monday, Wednesday and friday. I would like to have more experience in this course, which will help to give more information to pupils during the lesson. What trouble me that the course and work are the same time. As you know, it is summer hiliday and pupils do not come to school so our working hours begin at 9 o' clock. That is why I beg you to allow me to come to work at 11 these days. Considering the outcome of the training course, I hope you will consider my suggestion Thank you for your attention. Your faithfully, Zulfiya.
Dear Sir or Madam,

I am
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Zulfiya
who is an English teacher to your school. I am glad that the department is to hold an English training
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am sure it is of great
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to our English
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
skills
and take a high level CEFR certificate.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
am noticed
that the time of the training
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
is at 9 o'clock on Monday, Wednesday and
Possible spelling mistake found.
friday
.
Three successive sentences begin with the same word. Consider rewording the sentence or use a thesaurus to find a synonym.
I
would like to have more experience in this
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
, which will
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
to give more information to pupils during the lesson. What trouble me that the
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
and work are the same time. As you know, it is summer
Possible spelling mistake found.
hiliday
and pupils do not
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
to school
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
our working hours
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
begin
at 9
There should be no space here: "o'clock".
o' clock
.
That is
why I beg you to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
allow
me to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
to work at 11 these days. Considering the outcome of the training
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
course
, I hope you will consider my suggestion Thank you for your attention.
Did you mean "Yours"? (complimentary close)
Your
faithfully
,
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Zulfiya
.
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IELTS letter You are working in a company. You would like to join a training course related to you work. Write aletter to your employer. In your letter describe what course you would like to do. How this course might help in your work. Suggest suitable time for you to do this course

Letter
  American English
2 paragraphs
162 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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    Include an introduction and conclusion
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  • Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
  • Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
  • Fully explain these ideas
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    Support ideas with relevant, specific examples
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