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You are starting a new business and need to build a website. You have a friend who works for an IT company who you want to help you. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter describe your new business ask your friend to help you build the website say how you will thank your friend for his/her help

You are starting a new business and need to build a website. You have a friend who works for an IT company who you want to help you. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter describe your new business ask your friend to help you build the website say how you will thank your friend for his/her help PVVmg
Hi Prince, Hope you are doing great in life and professional space. I am writing to ask your help in creating a website for the new business I am setting up. You will be excited to hear that I am a Certified Professional Baker now specialising in Cakes and Pattiseries after having completed the Professional Baking course last year. You remember my fondness for baking since college years and after having gained the confidence and the required skills, I finally decided to seriously start a business as a Home Baker. For the marketing, I plan to advertise on social media platforms like Facebook, Instagram, Twitter etc where I will mention my website's link. As, I am expect to receive most of the orders online, I am looking to get a simple and interactive website created where people can conveniently choose from the cake options available, book a cake or can also order readily from the fresh stock available. The website should have the feature to auto-update the stock availability, enable customers to pay online or cancel order, and, also to submit custom requests. When the thought of a website came to my mind, the first person I could think of is you. I know you have plenty of relevant experience in website designing as the last time we met, you mentioned of a similar project you did for a new Restaurant in Mumbai that earned you a lot of appreciation. I hope you can do this for me and ofcourse, I would like to pay you appropriately for your valuable help as I know you will be spending time and effort for this project which otherwise you would have devoted to other freelance projects to earn some extra money. Please give it a thought. I would give you a call on the coming weekend to discuss more. Take care, Simran
Hi Prince,

Hope you are doing great in life and professional space. I am writing to ask your
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help
in creating a
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website
for the new business I am setting up.

You will
be excited
to hear that I am a Certified Professional Baker
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now
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specialising
in Cakes and
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Pattiseries
after having completed the Professional Baking course last year. You remember my fondness for baking

since college years and after having gained the confidence and the required
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skills
, I
finally
decided to
seriously
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
start
a business as a Home Baker.

For the marketing, I plan to advertise on social media platforms like Facebook, Instagram, Twitter etc where I will mention my website's link. As, I am
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expect
to receive most of the orders online, I am looking to
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get
a simple and interactive
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
website
created where
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
people
can
conveniently
choose from the cake options available, book a cake or can
also
order
readily
from the fresh stock available. The
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
website
should have the feature to auto-update the stock availability, enable customers to pay online or cancel order, and,
also
to submit custom requests.

When the
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
thought
of a
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
website
came to my mind, the
first
person I could
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
of is you. I know you have
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
plenty
of relevant experience in
You use this word too often, consider replacing it with
website
designing as the last time we met, you mentioned of a similar project you did for a new Restaurant in Mumbai that earned you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
a lot of
appreciation. I hope you can do this for me and
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ofcourse
, I would like to pay you
appropriately
for your valuable
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
help
as I know you will be spending time and effort for this project which
otherwise
you would have devoted to other freelance projects to earn
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
extra money.
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
Please
give it a
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thought
.

I would give you a call on the coming weekend to discuss more.

Take care,

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Simran
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IELTS letter You are starting a new business and need to build a website. You have a friend who works for an IT company who you want to help you. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter describe your new business ask your friend to help you build the website say how you will thank your friend for his/her help

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8 paragraphs
309 words
6.0
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