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You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter ● Give details of your study plans ● Explain why you want to get a part-time job ● Suggest how your friend could help you find a job

You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter ● Give details of your study plans ● Explain why you want to get a part-time job ● Suggest how your friend could help you find a job e55nG
Dear Alex, I hope my letter finds you in good health and mood. You can congratulate me! At last my dream has come true and next week I am leaving for Munich, as I passed my entrance exams with flying colours and now I’m a student at Munich State University majoring in Social Sciences. I have won the scholarship, but unfortunately, it doesn’t cover the expan sces for accommodation. I’ll have to pay for it those by myself. That’s why I was wondering if you could Could you do me a favor and look through the local newspapers for a part-time job for me? I think evening working hours would be ideal, as I’ll be busy with my classes during the whole morning and afternoon, as well. If you come across some proper ads, please let me know: , I’ll have my CV sent to the employer. I hope to arrange everything concerning my employment during the first week of my arrival. By the way, would you like me to bring some mouth-watering dry fruits made by my mother for you? Can’t wait to meet you again. I’ve missed you so much. Hugs and kisses, Helen
Dear Alex,

I hope my letter finds you in
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good
health and mood. You can congratulate me! At
A determiner cannot combine with a possessive pronoun. Did you mean simply "my dream" or "last dream"?
last my dream
has
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come
true and
next
week I am leaving for Munich, as I passed my entrance exams with flying
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colours
and
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now
I’m a student at Munich State University majoring in Social Sciences.

I have won the scholarship,
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but
unfortunately, it doesn’t cover the
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expan
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sces
for accommodation. I’ll
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have to
pay for it those by myself. That’s why I was wondering if you
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could Could
you do me a favor and look through the local newspapers for a part-time job for me? I
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
think
evening working hours would be ideal, as I’ll be busy with my classes during the whole morning and afternoon,
as well
. If you
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
come
across
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some
proper ads,
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please
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let
me know:
Put a space after the comma, but not before the comma
,
I’ll have my CV
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
sent
to the employer. I hope to arrange everything concerning my employment during the
first
week of my arrival.

By the way, would you like me to bring
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
some
mouth-watering dry fruits made by my mother for you?

Can’t wait to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
meet
you again. I’ve missed you
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:
so
much.

Hugs and kisses,

Helen
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IELTS letter You are going to another country to study. You would like to do a part-time job while you are studying, so you want to ask a friend who lives there for some help. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter ● Give details of your study plans ● Explain why you want to get a part-time job ● Suggest how your friend could help you find a job

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
195 words
5.5
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.0
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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