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You are shifting out of your accommodation. You think the place is suitable for your English speaking colleague who is arriving next month. Write a letter to your colleague- - explain why you are shifting out. - Describe your accommodation - Why is it suitable for your friend?

You are shifting out of your accommodation. You think the place is suitable for your English speaking colleague who is arriving next month. Write a letter to your colleague- - explain why you are shifting out. - Describe your accommodation - Why is it suitable for your friend? 7a0g3
Dear Dave, Hope this letter finds you in radiat health and the best of spirits. I am writing this letter to inform you that I am moving to Lahore from Islamabad because of landing a new job. Let me tell you in detail. You may have know that I was searching for a better job opportunities. Fortunatley, the last week I got a call from a prestigious telecom company to join as a finance manager with better perks and privilges. I am glad to tell you that I am going to join this organization in a new city. As you told me you are looking to rent a house in my city because of your job placement. I'm glad to tell you that you can hire my current appartment as i am leaving this week. It is a two bedroom flat with attached bathrooms. In addition, there is a large kitchen and a drawing room for guests. I would like to suggest it beacuse it is not only near to your new office but also located in a city center. Moreover, there is a range of international resturaunts nearby and a huge supermarket. Therefore, it would be better for you to move without a delay. I look forward to hearing from you! Yours lovingly, Farrukh
Dear Dave,

Hope this letter finds you in
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radiat
health and the best of spirits. I am writing this letter to inform you that I am moving to Lahore from Islamabad
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because
of landing a new job.

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Let
me
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tell
you in detail. You may have
Use past participle here: "known".
know
that I was searching for a better job opportunities.
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Fortunatley
, the last week I
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got
a call from a prestigious telecom
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company
to
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join
as a finance manager with better perks and
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privilges
. I am glad to
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tell
you that I am going to
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join
this organization in a new city.
“As” at the beginning of a sentence usually requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
As
you
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told
me you are looking to rent a
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house
in my city
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because
of your job placement. I'm glad to
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tell
you that you can hire my
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current
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appartment
as
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i
am leaving this week. It is a
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two bedroom
flat with attached bathrooms.
In addition
, there is a large kitchen and a drawing room for guests.

I would like to suggest it
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beacuse
it is not
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only
near to your new office
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but
also
located in a city center.
Moreover
, there is a range of international
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resturaunts
nearby and a huge supermarket.
Therefore
, it would be better for you to
This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :
move
without a delay.

I look forward to hearing from you!

Yours
lovingly
,

Farrukh

IELTS letter You are shifting out of your accommodation. You think the place is suitable for your English speaking colleague who is arriving next month. Write a letter to your colleague- - explain why you are shifting out. - Describe your accommodation - Why is it suitable for your friend?

Letter
  American English
7 paragraphs
214 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0
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Lexical Resource: 5.5
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Grammatical Range: 6.5
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Task Achievement: 5.0
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