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You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practise in the community hall. You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall. Write a letter to the manager. In the letter: describe what the group does explain why the group is good for the community suggest alternative days and times for practice

You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practise in the community hall. You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall. Write a letter to the manager. In the letter: describe what the group does explain why the group is good for the community suggest alternative days and times for practice WyqoW
DEAR SIR, MY REASON FOR WRITING TO YOU IS THAT WE ARE BEING INFORMED THAT WE COULD NOT GATHER IN THE COMMUNITY HALL FOR PRACTICE ON TUESDAY AND FRIDAY EVENINGS. WE ARE A GROUP OF AMATEUR MUSICIANS REGULARLY PRACTISE IN THE COMMUNITY HALL FOR THE LAST ONE AND HALF YEAR. WE PERFORM FOLK SONGS AND COUNTRY SONGS ON VARIOUS SOCIAL OCCASSIONS VOLANTARILY. AT PRESENT OUR GROUP CONSISTS OF 18 PEOPLE FROM DIFFERENT AGE GROUP AND PROFESSION. WE TRY TO ATTRACT TALENTS FROM VARIETY SEGMENTS OF THE SOCIETY. AND ALSO PERFORM SOCIAL WELFARE PROGRAMS ON A REUGLAR BASIS INCLUDING SPORTING EVENTS, CULTURAL EVENTS AND EDUCATIONAL PROGRAMS. WE BELIEVE ATTACHING YOUTHS AMONG THESE EVENTS DETER THEM TO PARTICIPATE IN ACTIVITIES THAT ARE MORALLY WRONG AND NOT GOOD FOR THE COMMUNITY. I HAVE TALKED TO THE GROUP MEMBERS AND WE HAVE DISCUSSED OTHER ALTERNATIVE DAYS AND TIMES FOR PRACTISE IF YOU ALLOW US. WE WOULD BE GRATEFUL IF YOU ALLOW US TO PRACTICE ON SATURDAY AND SUNDAY MORNINGS. I LOOK FORWARD TO HEARING FROM YOU. YOURS FAITHFULLY.
DEAR SIR,

MY REASON FOR WRITING TO YOU IS THAT WE ARE
BEING INFORMED
THAT WE COULD NOT GATHER IN THE COMMUNITY HALL FOR PRACTICE ON TUESDAY AND FRIDAY EVENINGS.

WE ARE A
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GROUP
OF AMATEUR MUSICIANS
REGULARLY
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PRACTISE
IN THE COMMUNITY HALL FOR THE LAST ONE AND HALF YEAR. WE PERFORM FOLK SONGS AND COUNTRY SONGS ON VARIOUS SOCIAL
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OCCASSIONS
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VOLANTARILY
.

AT PRESENT OUR
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GROUP
CONSISTS OF 18
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PEOPLE
FROM
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DIFFERENT
AGE
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GROUP
AND PROFESSION. WE TRY TO ATTRACT TALENTS FROM VARIETY SEGMENTS OF THE SOCIETY. AND
ALSO
PERFORM SOCIAL WELFARE PROGRAMS ON A
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REUGLAR
BASIS INCLUDING SPORTING
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EVENTS
, CULTURAL
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EVENTS
AND EDUCATIONAL PROGRAMS. WE BELIEVE ATTACHING YOUTHS AMONG THESE
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EVENTS
DETER THEM TO PARTICIPATE IN ACTIVITIES THAT ARE
MORALLY
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WRONG
AND NOT
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GOOD
FOR THE COMMUNITY.

I HAVE TALKED TO THE
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GROUP
MEMBERS AND WE HAVE DISCUSSED OTHER ALTERNATIVE DAYS AND TIMES FOR
Possible spelling mistake. 'PRACTISE' is British English.
PRACTISE
IF YOU
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ALLOW
US. WE WOULD BE GRATEFUL IF YOU
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ALLOW
US TO PRACTICE ON SATURDAY AND SUNDAY MORNINGS.

I LOOK FORWARD TO HEARING FROM YOU.

YOURS
FAITHFULLY
.
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IELTS letter You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practise in the community hall. You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall. Write a letter to the manager. In the letter: describe what the group does explain why the group is good for the community suggest alternative days and times for practice

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  American English
7 paragraphs
174 words
6.0
Overall Band Score
Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5
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    Vary your linking phrases using synonyms
Lexical Resource: 5.5
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  • Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes
Grammatical Range: 6.5
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  • Check your writing for errors
Task Achievement: 5.0
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    Present relevant ideas
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