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You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practise in the community hall. You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall. Write a letter to the manager. In the letter: describe what the group does explain why the group is good for the community suggest alternative days and times for practice

You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practise in the community hall. You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall. Write a letter to the manager. In the letter: describe what the group does explain why the group is good for the community suggest alternative days and times for practice WyqoW

DEAR SIR, MY REASON FOR WRITING TO YOU IS THAT WE ARE BEING INFORMED THAT WE COULD NOT GATHER IN THE COMMUNITY HALL FOR PRACTICE ON TUESDAY AND FRIDAY EVENINGS. WE ARE A GROUP OF AMATEUR MUSICIANS REGULARLY PRACTISE IN THE COMMUNITY HALL FOR THE LAST ONE AND HALF YEAR. WE PERFORM FOLK SONGS AND COUNTRY SONGS ON VARIOUS SOCIAL OCCASSIONS VOLANTARILY. AT PRESENT OUR GROUP CONSISTS OF 18 PEOPLE FROM DIFFERENT AGE GROUP AND PROFESSION. WE TRY TO ATTRACT TALENTS FROM VARIETY SEGMENTS OF THE SOCIETY. AND ALSO PERFORM SOCIAL WELFARE PROGRAMS ON A REUGLAR BASIS INCLUDING SPORTING EVENTS, CULTURAL EVENTS AND EDUCATIONAL PROGRAMS. WE BELIEVE ATTACHING YOUTHS AMONG THESE EVENTS DETER THEM TO PARTICIPATE IN ACTIVITIES THAT ARE MORALLY WRONG AND NOT GOOD FOR THE COMMUNITY. I HAVE TALKED TO THE GROUP MEMBERS AND WE HAVE DISCUSSED OTHER ALTERNATIVE DAYS AND TIMES FOR PRACTISE IF YOU ALLOW US. WE WOULD BE GRATEFUL IF YOU ALLOW US TO PRACTICE ON SATURDAY AND SUNDAY MORNINGS. I LOOK FORWARD TO HEARING FROM YOU. YOURS FAITHFULLY.

DEAR SIR,

MY REASON FOR WRITING TO YOU IS THAT WE ARE BEING INFORMED
 THAT WE COULD NOT GATHER IN THE COMMUNITY HALL FOR PRACTICE ON TUESDAY AND FRIDAY EVENINGS.

WE ARE A You use this word too often, consider replacing it withbodycrowdfactionclubcompanyband
GROUP
 OF AMATEUR MUSICIANS REGULARLY
Possible spelling mistake. 'PRACTISE' is British English.Practice
PRACTISE
 IN THE COMMUNITY HALL FOR THE LAST ONE AND HALF YEAR. WE PERFORM FOLK SONGS AND COUNTRY SONGS ON VARIOUS SOCIAL Possible spelling mistake found.Occasions
OCCASSIONS
Possible spelling mistake found.Voluntarily
VOLANTARILY
.

AT PRESENT OUR You use this word too often, consider replacing it withbodycrowdfactionclubcompanyband
GROUP
 CONSISTS OF 18 This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :individualsnationsociety
PEOPLE
 FROM This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:various
DIFFERENT
 AGE You use this word too often, consider replacing it withbodycrowdfactionclubcompanyband
GROUP
 AND PROFESSION. WE TRY TO ATTRACT TALENTS FROM VARIETY SEGMENTS OF THE SOCIETY. AND ALSO
 PERFORM SOCIAL WELFARE PROGRAMS ON A Possible spelling mistake found.Regular
REUGLAR
 BASIS INCLUDING SPORTING This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :occasionshappenings
EVENTS
, CULTURAL This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :occasionshappenings
EVENTS
 AND EDUCATIONAL PROGRAMS. WE BELIEVE ATTACHING YOUTHS AMONG THESE This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :occasionshappenings
EVENTS
 DETER THEM TO PARTICIPATE IN ACTIVITIES THAT ARE MORALLY
This phrase/word is too simple and can be replaced with:incorrect
WRONG
 AND NOT This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :beneficialproduct
GOOD
 FOR THE COMMUNITY.

I HAVE TALKED TO THE You use this word too often, consider replacing it withbodycrowdfactionclubcompanyband
GROUP
 MEMBERS AND WE HAVE DISCUSSED OTHER ALTERNATIVE DAYS AND TIMES FOR Possible spelling mistake. 'PRACTISE' is British English.Practice
PRACTISE
 IF YOU This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :authorize
ALLOW
 US. WE WOULD BE GRATEFUL IF YOU This phrase/word (depending on the context) can be potentially replaced with :authorize
ALLOW
 US TO PRACTICE ON SATURDAY AND SUNDAY MORNINGS.

I LOOK FORWARD TO HEARING FROM YOU.

YOURS FAITHFULLY
. 

IELTS letter You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practise in the community hall. You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall. Write a letter to the manager. In the letter: describe what the group does explain why the group is good for the community suggest alternative days and times for practice

Letter

American English

7 paragraphs

174 words

6.0

Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.5

Structure your answers in logical paragraphs
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One main idea per paragraph
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Include an introduction and conclusion
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Support main points with an explanation and then an example
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
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Vary your linking phrases using synonyms

Lexical Resource: 5.5

Try to vary your vocabulary using accurate synonyms
Use less common question specific words that accurately convey meaning
Check your work for spelling and word formation mistakes

Grammatical Range: 6.5

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences
Check your writing for errors

Task Achievement: 5.0

Answer all parts of the question
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Present relevant ideas
Fully explain these ideas
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Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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